Reviews for Morticia's Romance
Foreverglfan88 chapter 1 . 4/11
Good job! :)
Guest chapter 1 . 10/19/2012
Try editing okay, it will help me to be able to read this. if you do you will have more fans.
LilithFanBebeNeuwrotic chapter 1 . 8/16/2012
Okay, so what little bit of this story I did read, I had a hard time doing so. First off, I would recommend indenting alot more. It's intimidating to see just this massive paragraph in front of you. Also, quotations are very neccesary when writing dialogue. Be sure to indent and make a new paragraph each time a different person starts talking. For example:
"Blah blah blah blah," said Morticia. " Blah blah blah."
"Blabbity blah blah blah." Ophelia argued " Blah blah blah, blah blah"
And just to keep it interesting, use different descriptive words besides he said, she said. Maybe the person argued, or countered a remark. Maybe they exclaimed something or retorted a statement.
Im sorry this is so long, but I'mjust trying to help. :) feel free to message me anytime!