|Reviews for The Perils of Innocence|
| nkh1 chapter 26 . 3/10
Excellent story waiting for more...
| Guest chapter 26 . 3/7
Pls update soon!
| x chapter 16 . 3/2
Seems like Hermione is the central figure in this story. You seem to have also made her at least marginally more powerful than Harry. Fairly well written, but not for me.
| ruby2360 chapter 26 . 3/2
Awesome story so far!
I look forward to seeing where this goes...
| StealthUnicycle chapter 26 . 2/27
I just read through all of the chapters in one sitting. I thought that it said completed, not in progress, and I am IMMENSELY glad that this will be an ongoing work. I think the system of magic based on intent is well written; as is the parts of the adults and how they would go about dealing with the situation. It's always nice to see someone use Hermione's intelligence effectively without making her over-powered or the solution to all problems. The characters themselves were well done and I noticed no grammatical errors.
If you need a beta reader I would be more than happy to volunteer. I tutor English and have a job editing at university.
| Forensica X chapter 26 . 2/28
I'm LOOOVING this. I really hope to read more soon. I'm especially appreciative of how natural you've made everything feel in your narrative. Sometimes, I feel a lot of these "what if" single variable stories end up feeling rather forced.
Great job. Can't wait for the next installment.
| InsertHilariousPenNameHere chapter 26 . 2/27
So I finished this story in about a day, and am eagerly awaiting the next instalment. I noticed that you asked for a bit of 'Brit-picking', and being British, I just wanted to say that you've hot pretty much everything spot on.
The only problem I do have, and it's not even spelling/grammar related, is about the interactions between McGonnagall and the doctors at Esperança. I'm certainly not expecting you to go back and change it, what with your schedule and all, but I find it difficult to believe that Hogwarts would have /no/ options for students that want to return to the Muggle world. I'd imagine that, after graduation, there'd be a 'gap year' or two for intensive study. I was also disbelieving that McGonnagall would have no justification at all for erasing memories, and I think I read somewhere that accidental magic stops at 11/12? Don't quote me on that though.
Other than that, a superb story. Excellent writing, innovative and interesting plot, and fantastic dialogue. Can't wait for Chapter 2.
| crystalclear8050 chapter 26 . 2/19
I loved how you dealt with Pettigrew! I look forward to how you'll continue this story. Great job so far!
| Lego Land chapter 26 . 2/11
| at-nightfall chapter 24 . 2/11
I like this story very much, especially because it is a non standard approach, and much more bound to the normal world than most stories.
| Fallacy Chan chapter 26 . 2/10
I like the premise of the story, but I think it would be nice if you worked a little more on showing instead of telling. While it's fun to read about how the muggleborns learn to integrate the muggle and magical worlds, there's too much talking to make it truly enjoyable.
| charis-chan chapter 26 . 2/9
No! don't do this to me, I wnat to know what happens next :
Oh, well, life happens and I can relate to that. Thank you for writing, I'm waiting the next update eagerly :D
| butterflyrain23 chapter 26 . 2/6
Wow this is different. I came across this by accident but I really do love how you are having things. Seeing Harry getting support and help in this way is different but even though it hasn't usually been done i love seeing him get help and having Hermione and Dean there as well as a lot different. It also shows how you have it that a child can learn to control their magic if needed and without a wand as well.
| The Potters of the Future chapter 4 . 2/6
the grangers ar eputting way to much pressure on a 11 year old
| Hypochondria chapter 26 . 2/5
Interesting story. I like how they tried to qualify their magical ability. They do seem a bit overpowered though. Wandless and non verbal magic already? Also what about the bond the three of them have?