|Reviews for Phantasm of Oriense|
| Anon chapter 9 . 8/7/2014
I am in love with this story! Good luck if you decide to continue it
| Ayasaka Mao chapter 9 . 7/20/2014
Liked this story much after reading it in one go! XD
But hmmm...I hope you update this tory because I really want to know what happened next
Well, that goes to say if you have time, that is
I'll be waiting XDDD
| Dream Adept chapter 9 . 3/27/2013
This story is goddamn epic! I love it! The relationships you have among the characters are very interesting, and the war-style plot keeps me on the edge of my seat. Also, they way you describe their fighting paints a picture of the Class Zero characters' prowess in mind. And the love between certain pairs keeps making me squeal! Although there are grammar errors here and there, they are very easy to look over and don't ruin the pleasure of reading your fanfic. Please keep it up!
P.S. in chapter nine, I couldn't help but scream "KISS, KISS" at Ace and Deuce. Er, they will kiss eventually, right? Even just a tiny bit? Or even a peck on the cheek? Or even a *shot*
| Dyusu chapter 9 . 2/27/2013
I just found this fanfic as I was browsing through the Agito archives and got piqued with interest upon seeing your penname - same tumblr user that's been popping up frequently in the Type-0 tags I presume? o:
Anyways, I really love your characterization of these characters. There might not be much to go off now, but I really think you've captured their characters well. And I really love how the romance slowly develops over time, not instantly. I find that very realistic and I enjoy it. :
Well, I do hope you can continue this fanfic here. The fandom here really needs more active writers like you, I plan to pick up writing here myself. Can't wait for the next chapter!
| Yanagi Nagi chapter 9 . 2/27/2013
AAAAAAAAH YES another update! You're on the roll, husbando :D. The action-y scenes are pretty amazing, especially Jack's and Ace's. Jack's beyond badass here!
askjdlasjdal dat Deuce part. Is this the beginning of the love between those two? I-I can't wait x3
The last part with Cid... Now we know who's the mastermind. Not that it's wondrous in the first place knowing who's this douCid we're talking about :c
Where do you plan on continuing this :o DW? I am pretty fine with anything you choose, just make sure to tell us, ok? I'll keep supporting you, regardless of your choice!
| Jack Hargreave chapter 9 . 2/26/2013
Good to see an update, mate:)
Well, there was one thing with the grammar, you've put several "S"s where there's no need for them, like "surprises" and "fears". Skip the "S" in the end of the word, the soldiers may be plural, but they should share the same fear and be surprised.
Apart from that; good work, I did like the action scenes... even though Jack was a bit disturbing at the bar.
But I wonder this; where do you intend to move the story?
| Mirae-no-sekai chapter 9 . 2/26/2013
Ooh, action-y chapter!
Deuce had a pretty cool moment there, just playing the flute in the overrun city :D Brave and cute girl for the win and for the IC. And... did she use one of the secret-ish spells in-game? O_O
Jack has some spectacular moodswings :P And I liked how you include an in-game move for him (and Trey's Snipe Mode in all it's novel-ly and canon glory) and a lot of poker terms for Ace! He sounds so casual there...
Awww, lucky charm from Deuce... so sweet :D
That cliffhanger at the end... it's so intriguing...
Wish you luck getting reviews from Anons/lurkers... guess it's part ocf being one :P But I'm pretty sure this story is read a lot, and the fandom will picck up. However, choosing to move is your thing, so please tell us if/where you're doing so :)
| type-0 fan chapter 9 . 2/26/2013
Still lurking around here. Don't worry about the late updating! You still managed to give us yet another amazing chapter!
If you want to stop updating here tho, it's your choice. But make sure to give us a notice of its whereabouts, ok?
| Mirae-no-sekai chapter 8 . 1/22/2013
Went through this all in one sitting :D
All I can say is, just wow. Beautiful scope of the world. I like how you've taken the characters: those are some seriously beyond badass Trey, Eight and King! Not to mention the leads, who have also blown me away, or Deuce and Rem being just as plucky/adorable as expected :) The story is also nice, and I can't wait to see how everyone plays in, or if the other kingdoms will make a grand entrance.
Wish you well with your semester, and hope to be seeing more of this!
| Jack Hargreave chapter 8 . 11/13/2012
My turn to be sorry, for an late review that is.
While I do like this chapter quite a lot, there are some things I'd like to adress.
First and most formost is the number of sentences with past and present mixed in them. It doesn't really break the flow of the text, and the characters make up for it, but many of them feel like mistakes made by a rookie and not someone with your skills. I don't mean any offense with that, but I guess it feels a bit rushed at times and think you made changes in the text as you wrote and some things got left behind.
The growing relationship between Rem and Machina is something I thought about. I won't rant, but I think you should show the growth rather than telling us about it.
Over to other things: The friendship between Ace and Machina is really well displayed, and I salute you for that. Do something like that with Rem and Machina, and I'm sure things will turn out good.
Well, that's my nickle for now. Sorry if I seem harsh/ranting/or any other form of unpleasant.
| Muddy Writer chapter 8 . 11/13/2012
Can I like fangirl over this chapter for a second?
Anyway, I absolutely adore this chapter. It was well-written (what else can I say?). Everything had that nice ring to it and one scene led to another quite smoothly. I expected Machina to pledge his loyalty to Suzaku though, which I got wrongly. LOL. But that was cute. Not siding any country at the moment because his loyalty only lies on Rem. Weeeeee!
Please make it A2 in the end? Pretty please? Hahahaha... -hinting the MutsukixAce moment-
I wanna see more of Caetuna teaching Rem some magicks. Hahaha... that was an awesome part. Well, everything in this chapter was AWESOME.
Can't wait on the next chapter and read all about the 'devastating' effects it will have on the Korushi town. I wonder how Deuce will fare.
Thumbs up and please update faster! :D
| galahad chapter 8 . 11/11/2012
,this stry is epic! update soon please!
| Yanagi Nagi chapter 8 . 11/11/2012
We'll continue on for as long as we're still FABURUUSU kay!?
This chapter is... pure sex *A* Zhuyu, Caetuna, Qator, and Mutsuki in one chapteeeeer asdkljaslasjdbargle. M-Mutsuku being s-so m-moe...
S-Silently ships erryone x erryone here
| type-0 fan chapter 8 . 11/8/2012
Why ffnet doesnt have a 'shonen' category? Because I am sure as hell that this is considered one.
| Kunagiri chapter 8 . 11/8/2012
"And before anything, I am always Prince Machina's blade." His statement resounded, his will of fire was burning inside of him. "Therefore, should you ever intend on harming his lordship in any way, the flashes of my cards would be the last thing you shall witness, General Zhuyu of Suzaku."
This. Just this. THIS. Freaking THIS.
Really, that sums all my fangasming here. Ten stars out of ten! The last part with Ace-Mutsuki, Machina-Rem, and Trey were amusing as well. It gives me the vibe of...er... Pre-final battle scene in some RPGs.
Next chapter is going to take place in Korushi? So Deuce, Jack, and King in the end is probably going to end up in the mess as well xD. Very good chapter, I am so eager to read the next chapter, bro! GOOOOOO FOR IT!