|Reviews for Sakura treee|
| animelover212 chapter 1 . 8/19/2012
-pfft- feel sorry for the boys!.. hahaha.. anyway i like your story!. keep writing!
| Kyoto XD chapter 1 . 8/19/2012
sorry i need to do it fast
| July Passion chapter 1 . 8/18/2012
Okay, let's see here..
The title: Alright, the title; it's cliche I've seen it before. Also, tree isn't spelled 'treee'. Plus, it should be Tree with a capital 'T'.
second chapter sorry i dont know how to put the cpater together please help me :
First thing I notice about this is the grammar and spelling; it's very wrong. If you needed help with this, then you should have asked a fellow Gakuen Alice Author. They'd be glad to help you out.
Second off, the story itself...the Point of Views change too quickly. Keep it either one pov the whole time of spilt it in half.
The characters themselves are very OCC. Let's see, bascially this story needs a... lot of work. I'd recommend proof reading and reading some tips online with writing. Actually, if you need help anyone should be more than happy to help you out.
Honestly, I'm not trying to be mean. You're a good writer, I can tell. Though, it seems you need to practice a bit more, hm?
Quotation Marks Ex.
"Are you alright?" His voice lathered out huskily.
"I-I'm fine," She replied quietly.
That's what those should look like by the way.
Keep on writing, I know just by reading your work that you can do this. :)
Good luck and the best of wishes,