Reviews for The Mind of Prey
ruinedsandwich chapter 3 . 8/24
excuse me, what the fuck
Speedykitten1643 chapter 3 . 7/29/2014
Love the story hope you make even more.
chizuruhyuga17 chapter 3 . 7/24/2014
*slow clap*
xxxArixxx chapter 3 . 2/28/2014
Jesus... Christ. I think I actually cried at the ending. I might hate you.
On a different note, I absolutely loved this. It was... Amazingly written.
Jashinsangel0521 chapter 3 . 1/4/2014
... awesome yet creepy...
Princess LaLaBlue chapter 3 . 12/22/2013
Fantastic. Just, man, wow. Definitely never going out into the woods alone at night. Truly excellent story and your hints of the Slender world were fascinating without distracting from the moment. And the ending? Beautiful. Poor Sarah-Lee, she never stood a chance.
Princess LaLaBlue chapter 2 . 12/22/2013
That line about fear and its determination about living or dying...brilliant. Just, friggin brilliant. Love this so much, hoping for a most unhappy ending (though Sarah-Lee is a joy to enjoy).
Princess LaLaBlue chapter 1 . 12/22/2013
This, I like. First paragraph and I was hooked. Shame that this as a whole is so short, but as of this moment I am going to enjoy the rest of it!
White Maid chapter 3 . 10/16/2013
Oh mai. o/o
STAHP chapter 3 . 9/28/2013
Slenderman as a succubus o.O eww so that's what he does to you when he catches you, that pedophile
Jackline chapter 3 . 6/6/2013
I really found this story interesting; honestly didn't care too much for the M-rated dribble we all come to know as smut, BUT I did find it interesting how this story was written. The first two chapters that center around the main character seem choppy- black and white- as if this was the real inner workings of a traumatized person and as we get to the third and final chapter where the monster shows his true colors, it's as if the author goes into more detail to show Sarah-Lee's mindset as she spirals downward to her death and as she does so, we see just how primal the human subconscious can be . This is possibly a metaphor about how precious the last of anything can be, IDK. Or maybe the author is an idiotic genius. While reading it becomes apparent that even though this Slender is a monster with kindness, he is still just that- a monster... who has desires to be sated.
Sarah-Lee is just another meal.
Please keep on writing Miss Author, I do enjoy your works and I'm sorry for psychoanalyzing your work!
Michelle chapter 3 . 6/5/2013
I feel like you could have fleshed out the story more by:
-putting in slender's P.O.V. in the first two chapter's not just sarah lee's so we can get an idea on Slender's feelings...
-And if this is a dark romance story, there should be parts in the story where we can see a sort of attraction progressing like a crescendo; a build up. Instead I only see fear being expressed by Sarah Lee in almost the entire story.
Secondly:
The last chapter seemed much like a rape scene, in my opinion. It reminds me when Ayn Rand believed that women subconsciously want to be raped, Sarah lee's submission and gratitude for what slendy did to her in the end kinda proves this.
Although I wish nothing would prove that statement.
Perhaps a romance between slenderman and the character should be metaphysical besides only sexual intercourse "a la Science fiction"
The build up of attraction would make it seem less rape-like and understandable and why there's a hunger between the two. It would make sense.
The.Benevolent.Void.Mistress chapter 3 . 5/18/2013
*sobs brokenly* How sad for them Wahhhh TTTT
RekaChio chapter 3 . 4/3/2013
Oh Gaud o/o
Lots-of-Little-Pink-Clouds chapter 3 . 4/1/2013
Okay, I love this. A lot. :D Only thing that disturbed me was the tentacles. I'll never get used to that...
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