Reviews for Kung Fu Panda 3: Hidden Suspicions
ShadowBrook17 chapter 7 . 10/25/2012
Oh man, poor Tai Ling. And why am I getting a strange feeling about her and Tai Lung. It might just me being my weird self, (as proud of that as I am!xD) But really, you did great with this and as happy as I am to be caught up, I'm also sad that I have nothing else from you to read!:( Hopefully you'll have a new chapter up soon. You're doing amazing with it and I look forward to more!

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ShadowBrook17
ShadowBrook17 chapter 6 . 10/25/2012
Oh man, that ROCKED! I loved it and I can NOT wait to get onto the next chapter, which I'll read in a minute. But really, you've done an amazing job with Tai Ling, even though she's your OC, I know how hard it is to make your own up sometimes, but you've done amazing! And if you're still wanting to know on weather you should write a story about Tai Ling's past, I say... YES! YES! YES! I'd SO read it! And now, it's onto chapter 7 for me!

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ShadowBrook17
ShadowBrook17 chapter 5 . 10/24/2012
Oh man, now that math is over, I got to read again. And that was just AMAZING! Oh man, I just LOVED that chapter, it was just AMAZING! I wish I could read more, but I have a fencing class to get to. But again, that was an amazing chapter and I can NOT wait to see what happens to everyone next. WHOO!

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ShadowBrook17 chapter 4 . 10/24/2012
OH man, that was AWESOME! I feel really bad for poor Tai Ling. That's gotta be hard. I mean really, that sorta reminds me of my OC Shadow, and what happened to her in a way. You did great on this and I can't wait to see what happens next!

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ShadowBrook17 chapter 3 . 10/24/2012
AWESOME! Man, I'm glad I got a little time before my math lesson to do some reading. That rocked! And no, never to short! And well... I'm not really sure Tai Ling is on any side. I think she just wants to do what's right, over all, but I could totally be wrong, so I guess I'll have to keep reading to see if I am or not!:D

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ShadowBrook17 chapter 2 . 10/20/2012
Oh man, that was TOTALLY awesome! I loved that chapter and I can wait to see what happens to Tai Ling. I mean really, this is just amazing. I can't wait until I can read more. You're doing amazing, and I can't wait until I can read the next chapter!

Your fan and friend...
ShadowBrook17
ShadowBrook17 chapter 1 . 10/12/2012
Whoa, AWESOME! I can NOT wait until I can read more. You've done REALLY good with your story and I look forward to reading more. I mean really, that was just awesome and I love your character, Tai Ling. She's AWESOME! Can NOT wait to read more!

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Tai Ling the Snow Leopard chapter 7 . 10/8/2012
I am SO sorry about what the computer does about the word: 'Yinying'
Sorry! :(
Watch ur back. wherever u r chapter 5 . 10/4/2012
Ooooh! Looking good! :D
Can't wait for more!
Gdown94 chapter 5 . 9/22/2012
I think this chapter turned out quite well. The plot is progressing nicely, and you're maintaining a good balance of ambiguity and clarity, enough to keep your readers engaged. Further, all the character developments seem to be progressing nicely as well. The history behind Tai Ling is of particular interest; I think she is turning out to be a good protagonist, and has a lot of potential, if developed well. In my opinion, I think that how you handle Tai Ling's actions is what will make or break this story. Don't take this as absolute, by any means; it's just my thoughts. Don't become anxious about how you handle her character, either. Just let her develop as she naturally would, and everything will turn out well.

As I've said before, I think your story is progressing well and shows a lot of potential. I wish you luck on the next chapter, to which I look forward. Until then...

P.S. I apologize for taking so long to review this; I've just had one thing or another to do this week, and haven't really gotten the free time needed to read this and post a meaningful review. Hopefully I'll be a little more punctual in the next chapter, but no promises...
Gdown94 chapter 4 . 9/16/2012
It's nice to see another chapter up. You're developing the plot quite well. I'm particularly glad to see the inclusion of the scene from Tai Ling's past; it sheds a good deal of light on her character, which makes the story more engaging. The ambiguity of some aspects of this chapter are also nice; you're clearly developing tension in the plot, which gives it an overall drive and purpose, a sort of adhesive in the plot.

Overall, the writing is quite good. I only spotted two rough spots in the story, one being plot related and the other grammatical. The first - I don't think that Tai Ling's village would abandon her after one day. Or rather, I don't think she'd conclude that she "had no home" after just a few minutes (or hours; I don't know how long the event in question lasted). I think it would have been better to write about the days after, going into greater detail and depth in regards to her ostracism. Further, I think it you should have included some events from her wanderings, dragging out said time for some number of weeks (obviously skipping time in a number of places). Two or three scenes would have done well. Then her contact and eventual bond with Sharptooth would carry much more emotional weight. As it is, though, it's pretty good. I just think that the inclusion of these aspects would have made it better. Of course, that's just my opinion on the matter.

The second criticism I have is a small grammatical error early in the chapter. Consider the following sentence: "My village wouldn't except me because of 'him'. " "Except" is a preposition, meaning "with the exclusion of." For instance, you would use it as in the following sentence: "Everyone went home except me." So, the sentence in question means, essentially, "My village wouldn't exclude me because of 'him'." ("except" can be used as a verb in some limited instances). I believe the word you are looking for here is "accept", meaning "to receive with approval or favor." This is a pretty minor mistake, and I'm getting perhaps a bit finnicky here, but it exists none the less...

As I said, this chapter is pretty good. I think the plot is developing well, particularly the character of Tai Ling. My only real wish, and I apologize for not giving this a separate paragraph, is that the chapters were a bit longer. Shorter chapters make it harder for me to get into the story. But that's really a minor issue; it is alright as it is (still...). I think you are a burgeoning writer with a great deal of promise, and I look forward to your next chapter.
Gdown94 chapter 3 . 9/3/2012
Another good chapter. This one's a bit short as well, but don't try and force length on your next chapters; if you force them, they won't seem natural, which will distract the reader from the story. However, if you could extend them a bit...

Anyway, the events surrounding Tai Ling are very intriguing. You're doing a good job of perpetuating the trust/don't trust problem facing the five. Personally, and this is regarding my thoughts on what's happening, I'm a follower of the philosophy "fool me once, shame on you. Fool me twice, shame on me." So I'd have to say that I'd probably be a bit averse to trusting Tai Ling. However, she has manifested a number of behaviors that indicate that she is, or may be, on the five's side.

Well, as I've said before, you have a pretty good story on your hands. Don't let the lack of reviews get you down; "If you build it, they will come," as they, or rather the Bible, says (quote in relation to Noah's ark, but that's beside the point...). Good luck on your next chapter.
Gdown94 chapter 2 . 9/3/2012
So... I'm very sorry for taking so long to review the second chapter. I've been extremely busy as of late.

Anyway, the story is progressing very nicely so far. Personally, I think the chapters are a little short, but I can understand that, given the circumstances; you haven't exactly received a whole lot of encouragement or feedback on this one. And that's really a shame, because the plot is pretty engaging so far. Going back to the chapter length, I think you should have included the forthcoming questioning scene in this chapter; longer chapters make the story much easier to get into.

In regards to my thoughts on the plot, it's interesting to see that there is a trap in store for the Five, and perhaps even more interesting to see reservations on the part of Tai Ling. I can see these developing into a reversal of loyalties, but it's really to early to say.

As I said, the story is shaping up well so far. Good luck on chapter four, if you're still keeping this story active. I'll be along for the ride, at least.
Gdown94 chapter 1 . 8/24/2012
This seems interesting so far. I do have a few points to say, however, both good and bad.

First, I just want to get this off my mind now: I REALLY dislike first person narration. This isn't your fault at all, I just have an ingrained dislike of the style. I can get into stories written in first person, but it still irritates me. But like I said, I can suck it up.

Now that that's off my back, onto the review. Tai Ling seems to be an interesting character. A bit choleric for my taste, but that's okay. I think you should have waited a little while before introducing her, however. A good introduction should lay a groundwork upon which he/she can build, as well as acclimate the reader to the story, engage, or hook, the reader, and provide them with any necessary information (that's why it's called the 'exposition'). Your story works well as is, but I think it would have profited greatly from a longer introduction. But that's just my opinion.

I can't say that I like the name "Tai Ling". It's too close to "Tai Lung" for my tastes, but that isn't really important. Sometimes names are similar - that's just how life is.

I'm interested to see how the wolves play into this. Perhaps there is something more involved than the wolf gangs? Perhaps a darker force catalyzing the violence? Maybe... I suppose I'll see later.

This story shows some promise, and seems to be pretty good so far. I can't get to the other chapters right now, but later I'll get around to them. I'll probably review again around chapter 3 or 4, maybe dropping in a couple thoughts in chapter two. Until then, happy writing.
Watch ur back. wherever u r chapter 4 . 8/23/2012
Ok, let me say a few things. You have a good idea, but maybe a bit more action or something to keep readers hooked would be nice. I know you are trying to keep suspense, and you aren't doing to bad at that. Flipping between Tai Ling's POV and Po's is a nice touch, but it kind of makes the suspense go away from the big question: 'Trust Tai Ling or not?' But I think that if you are careful with what you put on Tai Ling's POV and keep things mysterious to build up questions, you could do quite well. It seems as if you are just being a little bit distracted by you other fanfics, so I'd advise that if you want to write better, stick to one until you have the whole thing planned out. I love the idea of your book, just maybe kick up on a few things and maybe change the summary to attract more readers and I think that this could turn out nicely. That put aside, I think that they should trust Tai Ling, it's quite given that she want to help them, but at the same time I'm not sure. She knocked out Po, and maybe the Five (you didn't say that, but it was hinted in the last chapter), and she seems not very afraid to threaten them. But at the same time she is trying to give them advice and guide them around a bit. I don't know. Keep making readers like myself ask questions like this, and you are well on your way.
Watch ur back. wherever u r :)