Cringe as fuck setting. Being the great great grandson to Chaos does nothing. Do you people seriously think powers carry over like that. The powers of demigods aren't genetic, they come from the very soul of a demigod. They don't just stack on like that, so being the great grandson of Chaos provides nothing especially because Chaos is a metaphysical entity of pure creation so it can't really have kids, Amaterasu could provide something to you don't get to be both, any power he gets there would be muted at best so really all his power would come from hades so his skill set would be akin to Nico.

i agree with ravendeath and I hope you update this fic and really just fine tune the grammar and add more chapters

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seriously this Naruto Bashed From Konoha trope is soo cringe..

let's use some brain.. why would konoha want to banish their jinchuuriki to outside world so another village can kidnap him? Jinchuuriki is Village's strongest weapon and this trope just broke that rule LMAO

nice

When will the next book be out

other than the grammar the plot is good

The idea for the story itself is pretty interesting but the grammar makes any attempt to enjoy the story practically impossible.

You’re author, the least you can do is fix your grammar. You really have to excuse for this. There are dozens of applications and websites that fix grammar for FREE. Please, use them.

gaia

Keeper was spelled wrong look for kipper

Please come back and fix all of your spelling mistakes.

Work on your english

It’s Kyubi not Kayubi

I realy hate Percy