|Reviews for Hear the Bells|
| alex chapter 6 . 2/7
buena muy buena historia
| taken4545 chapter 6 . 7/30/2016
add morr i loved it
| HanableKing28 chapter 6 . 10/10/2014
YES! Finally a lenghthly story about Train and Eve. I loved your story. Please keep on writing!
| journey chapter 6 . 6/15/2014
thank u for skipping the really gross part your a cool writer can you do me a favor and write more about sven finding out but them still loving each other please thanks :)
| Jardez the Various chapter 6 . 9/17/2013
What a way to end a chapter/tale. Having the mood set up, and right as we expect a soft and quiet ending, "BANG!" Train gets the realization that Sven may not approach this situation with warm fuzzies. XD
I kinda wish that there was a bit more development into that scene though. Maybe it could have been described somewhat like this:
"But as I lay my head on his chest, I felt a light thrust as Train suddenly sat up.
I asked Train, "What's wrong?"
He looks at me with a sense of realization and even fear. Finally Train says, "Sven is gonna kill me."
Thankfully I got the message easily enough. Putting my critique aside, I did like how this chapter/story turned out.
| Jardez the Various chapter 5 . 7/20/2013
I'll admit, I had a small grin during the whole chapter. "Normally" I would find it strange for Eve and Train to get this close in a relationship. (The new age difference isn't a problem, not at all. I'm just more used to them having more of a brother/sister relationship.) :)
And yet somehow during this story, having them get together seems very plausible. Nice job.
| Jardez the Various chapter 4 . 7/20/2013
Another sweet chapter. :D I'm definitely curious as to what Train has in store.
| B chapter 1 . 7/13/2013
Black Cat DOES deserve a huge fan base
| Jardez the Various chapter 3 . 7/5/2013
Aww, this is a beautiful chapter. .
| Jardez the Various chapter 2 . 6/1/2013
Aw man. 0.0 I never imagined Eve going through that kind of situation. I didn't doubt if she would okay or not, but still, she's one of those character that you really wouldn't anything bad to happen to them.
Good drama for this chapter. Well done.
| Unknown chapter 1 . 5/3/2013
You did well my friend
| Jardez the Various chapter 1 . 4/28/2013
I'm sure your tired of hearing that the chapter was short, but I think the chapter was explained pretty well. I think it's worth checking out. :)
| Grey Wolf4 chapter 6 . 3/31/2013
This is a great ending to a very good Train/Eve story.
Very well done!
| lilsnuggums chapter 5 . 2/18/2013
Wow. This is really good. I really like how this is going, I wouldn't do the whole third person thing though, with you switching pov's already I think it would be too much. I think you should do some more of his teasing and then do a flashback of when train first really fell in love. Like I know about the beginning but really give us full detail. I love the story line already though. The tease was great! Hope to see more. If you don't finish do you think I could adopt this?
| GriffinRose chapter 5 . 1/26/2013
For not proofreading this chapter it wasn't that bad. A few mistakes here and there but nothing the rest of us haven't done before. Just pay attention to sentence structure; there were a few places when you used a comma that it should have been a period and vice verse. That will help with the overall flow of the story.
Content wise I thought it was okay. I liked that you had Train teasing Eve; it's so in his character!
I hope you update soon!