|Reviews for The Shallow Grave of Secret Longing|
| Long Live BRUCAS chapter 39 . 1/11
Great job. So happy Steve was found and by nice people. But happier he got better and went back to his old life. Its were he needed to e to get better and get over and through what had happened to him.
| Marie-Line chapter 39 . 6/10/2015
I'd only read this one this year, sorry to be so late !, but that was a VERY good one !
| weemcg33 chapter 39 . 5/1/2015
It may have been a slightly darker fic compared to the others but it was still amazing. I loved every single chapter and more than once let the tears flow. If anyone could come out the other side of something so horrible, so painfully sad, it would be Steve. I loved your character Kip, and I even started to like Rabbit lol
This could easily have been an episode, a two parter and I would have loved it. That man is very good at the emotional scenes.
Thank you for the awesome read, now I guess I should go feed my three ninjas kitties who are staring at me wondering why I haven't fed them yet lol
| weemcg33 chapter 32 . 4/30/2015
WOW. This chapter had me in tears. It was absolutely heartbreaking when Danny realised what Steve had done. I'm just glad they got there in time and that Kip was there to take charge. She is a great character and I'm hoping that Steve finally realises that he isn't alone, that his ohana is there for him. I hope he remembers how he and Kip first met. I liked that flashback, it seemed like something Steve would do even at ten years old.
| weemcg33 chapter 4 . 4/29/2015
Okay is it bad that reading Steve shed a few silent tears almost had me in tears, god that was heartbreaking and I have a feeling its just getting started.
This is great and I can't wait to find out what happened to poor Steve. Hopefully his ohana will be able to help him.
| Elanshaw chapter 39 . 8/20/2014
I'm going to add to your hundreds of well deserved reviews to let you know that you did such an awesome job with this story.
I was shaking my head a lot as I read it because it went beyond fan fiction into something more..
Loved it very much.
You should be very proud of this work of yours.
Thank you for posting.
| Nadamalki chapter 39 . 7/25/2014
This is probably one of the best, if not the best, story I've read on . I'm more into Supernatural stories, but I pretty much ran out of stories to read and decided it to hit it with other TV Shows, Hawaii Five-0 came up, and I feel so damn lucky to have bumped into your story.
Your material is that of a publisher's quality. It's flawless in every sense of the word. The plot is gripping, the scripts are intriguing, the characters are spot on, the whole thing was just perfect I seriously forgot I was reading a fanfiction and not some Best Sellar on Amazon! Have you ever considered publishing stories as a real job? You have the skills, I swear it!
I read the whole story in one go on a weekend, I think it'll take me a while to get over it. The emotions you piled on Steve were just so raw and infectious. I have no idea how you managed to string the whole story around those emotions, what a story... what a story. I can't even call it fanfiction anymore, its just too good.
| Sci F.I. Warper chapter 22 . 7/9/2014
I regret everything I said about Steve in that last chapter now. *whimpers* I want old Steve back! Him in a button-down that does not include black dress pants over brown boots should be forbidden (and, yes, I noticed he did that a couple times in season one. Don't judge me...).
Kamekona is a wise man. And I love how you've brought in the extended ohana to help. The more the merrier!
*glares at author* Kip's gonna make me cry isn't she? Woman, this better not turn into a competition between her and McGarrett as to who's going to break me first.
| Sci F.I. Warper chapter 21 . 7/9/2014
Seriously, I cannot stress enough how much I want Danny and Kip to meet right now. In fact, I would probably pay as much as Danny would to get her on the Five-0 payroll as a nurse or something. Because they are mutually fantastic.
Now to Steve. Don't run you...*throws hands in the air in futile gesture* That's it. I'm done. I'm out of nice things ti say and I would very much like to see any member of the Ohana give that man a swift kick in the ads...followed by a hug. Idiot.
| Sci F.I. Warper chapter 20 . 6/29/2014
First, OMG! I want Kip as my grandmother or something! That woman is an absolute, firery de-light!
Second. Hmm. What job in civilian life could Steve possibly do that would employ his particular set of skills? Oh, I know. How about being the head of Five-0 again?
*sigh* At least it's nice to see the McGarrett we all know (a.k.a. the brash idiot getting himself stuck in situations he should know better than) is still in there, provided he's in the right frame of mind. We just have to figure out how to make those windows of time last.
| Sci F.I. Warper chapter 19 . 6/27/2014
Bad plan again! Bad plan again!
Whoever these bitter, unhappy people at the end are; I would highly recommend they not mess with Steve. It would be a worse than bad idea.
Aw, poor Kono, though. Danny, stop people choke on their gum! It's not polite! Hmm. Now I really want them to buy the watch.
| Sci F.I. Warper chapter 18 . 6/26/2014
Seriously. Trouble is a cute, little, yapping, Labrador puppy that follows at Steve's heels because it's got nothing else better to do. Can the man not catch a break?!
That said, I think I am going to really like Kip. She's sassy; and, since the dummy ran off without his back-up, the perfect sounding personality to deal with Steve...provided she doesn't get killed first.
*whimpers* I can't decide yet if I think Steve needs a hug or a slap upside the head or both. I'm leaning more and more towards hug, however.
| Sci F.I. Warper chapter 17 . 6/23/2014
Stephen J. McGarrett, get your bony ass back to your ohana this instant! AUGH! *throws hands up in exasperation*
Apparently running away is also a genetic disorder in his family...Well, hopefully the old woman will be able to break through to him. I get the feeling she's had some experience in these matters.
| Sci F.I. Warper chapter 16 . 6/23/2014
Shit. Shit shit shit shit.
This is not good. Not good at all. I simultaneously love this story and hate it at the same time. Mostly because I'm simultaneously on both sides of the spectrum with Steve and Danny: sad and furious.
| Sci F.I. Warper chapter 15 . 6/23/2014
I...I don't know how to react to this chapter.
Well, okay first, CHIN! Yay yay yay yay! Very little gets past that wonderful man! And woot for Kono! I know that hug was rough on Steve; but hopefully it'll be something we can look back on as a marker for how far he gets.
Esquivel's okay I guess. I haven't really constructed an opinion of the guy yet other than he's a shrink
Now for the last section. Am I a terrible person for being glad this happened? I mean, on one hand, my heart's breaking for both the boys and I can definitely understand where Danny's coming from at least (I can only sympathize for Steve, unfortunately). However, I feel like they needed to hit this wall. A rock-bottom base to build on, if you will. I just hope Steve is far enough from the edge he won't do something ridiculously stupid...for him.