That was AWESOME!
I can totally see Obi-Wan acting like that. Hehehe.

Keep it up!

So cute!

This was a lovely story. Obi Wan is one of my favourite star wars characters, and I loved this portrayal of him. I think it suited him very well. And I loved how he was able to bring Qui Gon out of his depression, it was very sweet indeed. I enjoyed the descriptions of meditation, and the way Obi Wan could sense the force so well.

This story brought tears into my eyes! I LOVED IT!

that was sweet

Awww. I *love* child Obi-Wan and Qui-Gon fics. So cute! Thanks for sharing. Made me grin.

So cute! I love little Obi-Wan stories and this one was just adorable! For your first English fic, this isn't bad. If you are going to continue this story, though, I would suggest a beta reader to help with some of the grammer. Putting quotation marks around dialouge would help as well. Overall, it's a sweet little story, and it made me smile. Good luck!

Wow. I love it.

There are some spelling errors, but other than that, I like this fic. :)
Keep writing, b/c practice makes (almost) perfect. And read more English stuff. Better yet, with a dictionary to help you. Or...get a beta.
I guess I'll just shut up now...

great start! In terms of errors you REALLY need someone to correct this because you are not always conjugating properly. You also need to fix your grammar. im happy to go through it if you want me too but in the long term i think you need to get yourself a proper beta.