|Reviews for Homeland|
| BACON COKE chapter 1 . 8/2/2013
THE BEST THING SICE COKE!
| Alphinia chapter 19 . 1/16/2013
I'm a little sad to see this version being left alone, but I perfectly understand where you're coming from. Planning is one of those things that is hard to figure out until you realize you have it wrong on your first story. The same thing happened to me more than once.
I will of course return to review the new and improved version :)
| M.T.Pockets chapter 5 . 1/11/2013
These chapters were alright, nothing amazing, but still good. I really really like Konnor and am looking forward to seeing more of him. He's a great rival, but he's also a very good human being. I'm glad that he won the battle too because its always important for the main character to have room on grow. Sorry that's really last chapter, but I didn't want to write seperate reviews. I don't know how I feel about Vin yet, he's still really new, but so far I feel like its just been too easy for him and Valon to be friends again. The dialogue was much better in chapter 4, but then it was not so great in chapter 5 which felt rushed. Usually I'm happy about the length though.
| Alphinia chapter 18 . 1/9/2013
Short chapter, yes, but it was still nice to get an update. I would've reviewed sooner but my AP classes are draining the life out of me.
It seems that my predictions were right; Valon finally has another ally on board. I have no idea how the two of them can ever stand up to Cole (Unless Vin somehow helps them), but Valon has already shown how intelligent he is in battle. Hopefully he'll think up something good.
Three major stories like yours would be very difficult. I can barely write one. However, I also know that if you don't start working on a new idea then it'll just distract you so much from your old ones that you can't write them either. I usually just don't post all of mine online so I won't be pressed to update. What a brave soul you are for doing that XD
| M.T.Pockets chapter 3 . 1/8/2013
The first chapter was a bit disappointing and could have done a lot more to grab the reader's attention. Still, the next chapters were alright. I just hope there will be more to Kyra then the simple role of romantic interest. I find Konner and Cole to be more interesting then Valon, I'm hoping that Konner and Valon end up working together. I'm not ready to form opinions yet about the OCs because I feel like I haven't seen enough of them. Archie and Maxie were well written though. The dialogue was well done.
| Guest chapter 18 . 1/7/2013
lol for it just being a filler chapter it was preaty good
| Omega the Omniscient chapter 18 . 1/7/2013
Well, this should certainly complicate things. I wonder if those two will have to battle.
Minor grammar note: I noticed a few "your"s that should be "you're"s and a "confidant" that ought to be "confident." Otherwise it's looking good.
Looking forward to the battle next chapter(or whatever sort of conflict is coming. Battle seems like a safe bet).
| Puttylol chapter 2 . 12/7/2012
Like I said before, I love your writing style! It's so descriptive and yeah xD hope I can write as well as you one day
SO TEAM MAGMA AND TEAM AQUA COME IN! This is going to be exciting! But I'm going to have to save it for later, since I don't wanna finish this that quickly. :D
| Puttylol chapter 1 . 12/7/2012
So here I am! I really like the tone of this. It seems so dark and mysterious .
And WOW, your writing style is really good. One of the best I seen on Fanfiction. I can already tell this story is going to be awesome!
| Reyow chapter 17 . 12/5/2012
oooooooo he knows now
| not my real name213 chapter 17 . 12/5/2012
Finaly a new chapter! And a great one at that! Keep up the good work!
| Alphinia chapter 17 . 12/5/2012
Yay! A Homeland update!
It was nice to see Valon in action again, and the fact that the grunts really are sort of scared of him. He could definitely use that to his advantage as long as those who know his secret permit him to run wild with it.
I think Konner (Jeez, I always want to spell his name like the Connor in my story XD) has got a definite idea about what Valon's doing. Maybe he'll finally get some much needed assistance.
| Omega the Omniscient chapter 17 . 12/4/2012
Hm. Valon's made a nice impression on those grunts. Not so nice on Konner it seems. I'm not quite sure what he's figured out, but I'm sure that cliffhanger will be resolved next chapter.
| Omega the Omniscient chapter 16 . 10/28/2012
Hmm. I'm not very good at critical evaluation, but I think the battles are decent. Interactions between characters seem off to me, but I'm not sure why. Sorry.
Still, I'm enjoying this, and I'm definitely following to see how things play out.
| Omega the Omniscient chapter 15 . 10/28/2012
It seems Green's plan has failed. I expect there will be some manner of retribution for that. For now, though, to the battle's conclusion!