|Reviews for City Of Delusion|
| gemini-rose16 chapter 3 . 10/25/2012
OMG please update soonxxxx
| Kerubim chapter 3 . 10/25/2012
*gets close to your ear and whispers, in the most creepy way* "update"
| ousia chapter 3 . 10/25/2012
great story! I'm very much excited about the next chapter!
Keep up the good work! I can't wait for Hermione and Snape to interact... on some level at least.
| Grapes chapter 2 . 9/25/2012
How is the second chapter related to the first? I'd really like to see how they'd connect. Please continue! :) G
| semicharmed chapter 1 . 9/8/2012
I suggest you get a beta reader.
When you mention Rachel I though that this was going to be a Law & Order: SVU/Harry Potter crossover. I'm somewhat intrigued.
| onecelestialbeing chapter 2 . 9/8/2012
Wow the tension...you can cut it with a knife. Another nice update!
| sorrowsown chapter 2 . 9/7/2012
Great start to the story, I look forward to seeing how Snape makes his way into their group!
| rachelllll chapter 1 . 8/26/2012
omg this is really good Farah! keeep on writing omg wow I've never read a fic similar to this and wow yes I need more! hehe I love the characters and pairing :-)
| nene27 chapter 1 . 8/27/2012
Very promising start. I definitely want to read some more and find out what happens next.
| mrsamandak chapter 1 . 8/26/2012
| Sithtar chapter 1 . 8/26/2012
The 'suspects' were obvious since it is a Harry Potter story. Is Larson an OC. He did a good job. I can't imagine why they are in New York. From the description at the Diner I thought it was when they fled Bill's wedding and since this was AU Severus had shown up and then the Police.
Didn't expect this to be in another country. That changes things considerably. There was no comment about their wands being found on them when they were arrested, do wand holsters have anti-muggle charms on them to prevent detection? You don't describe Severus by his hair but then he is an adult (37 if this is the summer/early September after HPB/beginning of DH). Ron and Harry would be 17 and Hermione depending on when in September (Larson did mention dropping his daughter off at school) either is still 17 or just about to turn 18.
An interesting beginning, I look forward to more to see where this goes.
| onecelestialbeing chapter 1 . 8/26/2012
Yes I do and keep it going!
| sorrowsown chapter 1 . 8/26/2012
I really like it so far. please keep writing I'm looking forward to seeing what all this is about and why they couldn't just use a obliviate. why would they let themselves be arrested in the first place? oh so confusing. Oh, I noticed you wrote "pack" instead of "pact" just thought I'd mention it.
| hayleyfrickinglaame chapter 1 . 8/26/2012
I love this story already and its only the first chapter. I loved Larson is that his first name or his last name? Yeah from that chapter I recognise the jist of the story now. I like it how Ron is just staring into nothing when he hears the questions and Snape gotta love snape ;) I like it how they're wizards and witches in a muggle holding cell in New York I love it personally and I like it how Hermione would be silent in a muggle holding cell and at the end the fury comes out of her, I love it :D
| worrywart chapter 1 . 8/26/2012
Intriguing start. If English is not your first language, you're handling it well, but you may want to find a beta to help you perfect your story. I like the start well enough to keep reading updates.