|Reviews for fallen apart|
| Crazylove33 chapter 1 . 1/18/2013
So sad why! please continue
| keikari lover chapter 3 . 11/9/2012
why are you so cruel!
| HawkFrost21 chapter 3 . 9/1/2012
Is Kei gonna commit suicide? :D
| CFL chapter 2 . 8/31/2012
I don't know what to say...
HIKARI, ON THE VERGE OF DYING!
it's all so fast!
but then again, I LIKE IT :))
seeing how Kei will come back to her and spend most(or all of his time with Hikari) -'I think?...'
Please update soon!
| HawkFrost21 chapter 2 . 8/30/2012
Please listen, CHECK YOUR GRAMMAR AND SPELLING
and please separate the dialogues from one another
also, this chap's a little fast
try adding suspense in it next time
| hiiragizawa29li21 chapter 2 . 8/29/2012
oh my! takishima is sad! please continue it i really likeit
| avatar yangchen chapter 1 . 8/29/2012
hey guys this avatar yangchen the author of this story sorry i havent been able to post another chapter ive been so busy with band and school i hardly get any sleep but ill try to update another one soon thanks for being patient and have a great day!
| fangirl chapter 1 . 8/28/2012
i really like it but hope it was longer plezz update soon
| iLuvhikari chapter 1 . 8/26/2012
waiting for the next chapter _
| HawkFrost21 chapter 1 . 8/26/2012
1.) I recommend you to read and take other stories as reference guides for your fanfic
2.) Re-read your story and check for wrong grammar and misspellings
3.) use periods and commas every next sentence
4.) separate the dialogue from the others (it'll confuse the readers on who-is-who talking)
I don't mean to be rude/mean
In fact, I really like the idea of your fanfic
You got me intrigued
I want to know what happens next :)
oh! and don't let it get to ya, the things that I said above there are recommendations and suggestions. Just wanna help :)