|Reviews for Metroid: Navigator|
| ShadowSlayer17 chapter 2 . 11/8/2012
This was actually pretty realistic and creative. I can see why people are following your story.
| Insomniac By Choice chapter 2 . 9/29/2012
I really like the concept. I do not like the writing.
"Your on time,...and whereing your power suit" is not spelled or punctuated right, and I can't tell if you even bothered to go back and line edit.
You've really got to slow down and write more, well, sentences into your paragraphs. Look at the number of them that are just a single line. Sometimes that's OK, for dialogue or pacing. But when they're all that way, it means you're not really fleshing out any ideas (if we understand a paragraph to be devoted to a given idea).
Thumbs up to universe expansion and tackling a subject basically no one else bothers to. But it needs a lot of work to be worthwhile.
| Anonymous chapter 2 . 9/13/2012
Where's the actual story in this chapter?
| Yosuga Kamino chapter 2 . 9/13/2012
Is this it? D:
It needs more words.
I'm sorry but this chapter needs more information on what's going on instead of writing it in a few words.
| Shortchannel4 chapter 2 . 9/13/2012
Way too short of a chapter
| Shortchannel4 chapter 1 . 9/12/2012
Interesting plot. Never seen a story about Rodney
| Yosuga Kamino chapter 1 . 8/31/2012
Nice story! About time someone made a fanfic about Samus family! _