|Reviews for In pursuit of Happiness|
| Jada Ross chapter 3 . 7/16
Stfu Naruto y’all bout some we gon save you BITCH if you don’t go somewhere ain’t you just call her plain ugly weak and said she stutter to much I’m telling y’all niggas ain’t shit
| Krishtina ch chapter 6 . 4/5/2015
This is sooo great... Other lemons are boring but this story is just to adorable... My heart ached and I love it on how sasuke treats hinata.. Please don't let that bitch sakura harm their beautiful family... And please update
| glowingqueen chapter 1 . 2/14/2014
I like this story in a way that it teaches Naruto a lesson about taking Hinata's love for him for granted. However, the punctuation and grammar is atrocious. Also, there is at least one plot hole-what happened to Team Hebi after Sasuke and Hinata develops? Where did they go? I would like it if you can take the time make some revisions to this story to make it more professional such as put the sentences into paragraphs and get some beta readers to make this story has a lot of potential and I would personally appreciate you.
| shamilia chapter 10 . 2/6/2014
I LOOOVVVEEE this story! You are an amazing writer... It's beautiful written!
| Dangerously Disheveled chapter 10 . 12/11/2013
i just love hina/sasu pairings! :P
| Saki-Hime chapter 10 . 10/20/2013
I like how Sasuke doesn't give up. Hope Hinata just falls for him already. Great, update soon.
| Seraphina Dragon chapter 10 . 10/16/2013
hope to read more soon
| Akumakisses chapter 10 . 10/3/2013
This was such a wonderful and cute chapter, I absolutely loved it. Especially how you gave us an insight on how Sasuke and Hinta's relationship developed & Daring Hinata is not too bad*giggles*
Anyways great chapter, can't wait for the next one
| cooper80 chapter 10 . 10/3/2013
Cant wait fir the next chapter hope you update soon
| Crazygirls24 chapter 10 . 9/20/2013
It getting realy good...!
| Im a tomato chapter 1 . 7/10/2013
I absolutely luurved the plot but you mentioned they were only a 'little' bit ooc? They were actually kind of really ooc but more of an 'exaggerated' personality kinda way. Oh, and I also love how you use semi colons (most people find it REALLY hard to use) but in some places they aren't exactly used correctly... A semi colon acts kind of like a comma, but used for longer pauses, I guess? It's really hard to explain but I think an example of using a semicolon would be: 'I pulled a fresh, ripe tomato out of the fridge; it was essential to make my homemade pasta sauce'.
I hope none of this is discouraging you or offending you in any way...(im VERRRRRY sorry if any of it does)
Anyway, overall the story was fantaaaabulous:) keep up all your great work:)
If you ever want me to proof read any of your chapters, just tell me:) my username here is mehpocky (I couldn't be bothered logging in first and im in love with tomatoes)
| Le poke chapter 9 . 7/10/2013
Dude, as much as I understand that you hate sakura with a fiery passion, you didn't have to make her so ooc!
From the looks of things the story should be set in shippuden or later (as in they are 15/16 or older) and sakura has more self control and has a lot of respect for her friends. (Ya know it would even be cool to say that sakura would have only been upset to know then be a lil depressed to know hinata was married to sasuke instead of being like karin, who is more like completely obsessive over sasuke...)
| Guest chapter 9 . 4/29/2013
Omh i love your story! I hate Sakura with a passion and i love the Sasuke and Hinata relationship. I love how soft and loving and sensitive Sasuke is.
| xxxdemonkingxxx chapter 9 . 4/29/2013
Damnnn this bitch is fucking crazy! Hoes don't know when to stop
| Guest chapter 9 . 4/29/2013
Shouldn't Sakura be punished by Tsunade for this - I mean, she endangered the lives of Sasuke, Hinata and their unborn child? I have a hard time imagining that she would be let off. As a ninja, her body and mind are weapons and attacking a fellow nin (not to mention a civilian - the baby) should result in stripping her off her chakra and nin status, perhaps even prison.