|Reviews for Keeper of My Soul|
| meinfeinsleib chapter 1 . 5/6/2013
I liked the story. It was sweet and cute, but personally I felt there was more "fire" between Ian and Wanda at the end of the book. So, when their relationship kind of set back to a luke-warm state i was disappointed; but, overall I loved the reality of Wanda's situation. :)
| bellegold89 chapter 1 . 2/21/2013
that was fab! :)
| AnotherAdventureAwaits chapter 1 . 1/15/2013
I really liked reading this. Most host smuts I've read aren't really realistic and show Wanda and Ian as pros at sex and knowing what to do but I like how both are unexperienced and nervous but still get to share a beautiful moment together. You're a really great author! Keep on writing! c:
| Amber Esme Hermione chapter 1 . 10/22/2012
Very intense, but what I loved most was the characterization. You capture the depth and complexity of the relationships. One of my favorite moments was Mel's admission that they knew Wanda had lied about her age.
| Tech-Man chapter 1 . 10/12/2012
That was a nice little story. I was wondering why the souls would have condoms and other contraceptives in their pharmacy's. I thought that perhaps they had discovered the joys of sex and wanted to engage in such behavior themselves, but that didn't seem to really fit with my impression of the souls.
Either way it was a well written story and I enjoy reading fics where Wanda is happy with not being thrown into the group with Wes and the others.
| Xoxoxbabychick chapter 1 . 10/5/2012
That was so amazing... You need to add more. Defs.
| VioletO'Shea chapter 1 . 9/25/2012
I like it! Such a cute story!
| Alkyon chapter 1 . 9/1/2012
This is very good, very well written! I particularly enjoyed the way you approached Ian and showed he's vulnerable too. We don't get to see that in most stories. I also liked how mature you made Melanie. I was a bit surprised with how brave and calm and determined you made Wanda - a bit different from the way I think of her but I didn't mind.
The last part - the lemon - was okay, not fantastic but decent. I liked the earlier part better, but that's a general problem with lemons: it's very difficult to keep them interesting and surprising. Once you've read a few, you know what's next. This is, of course, a criticism not just for you, but for everyone writing such scenes. Maybe some more dialog between the two would help, although it's still very difficult to avoid the cliches.
Also, another thing that bugs me about 'first time stories' (and which also is not specifically for you but for everyone trying to write them), is that they often escalate from kissing to sex with no intermediate steps. Of course, that can happen and does happen sometimes. But most of the time, and especially when there is a long waiting time and a relationship evolving, there are intermediate steps - some kisses going a bit further than usual, some touching, some awkward moments where you wonder if you went too far or not far enough, some discussions, jokes, glances, or laughs, not necessarily directly related to sex but definitely sparkled by desire and seeking intimacy and thinking of each other naked... There are so many small moments that lead to the "big" one of the first time! Unfortunately most people tend to skip them, although personally I think they are much more interesting! Especially for Ian and Wanda who share the same bed - for god's sake! - there ought to be some moments where they get glances of each other's body a bit more than they expected, they touch each other in their sleep, they see each other's underwear... What do they say to each other then? I'd love to read that.
Sorry for the rant - it wasn't meant especially for you, your story just triggered it. Apparently it was a very good one! ;)