This was so wholesome. Truly I enjoyed this short story.

Oh. My. God. This is even better than your two Glance stories. And it brings up all kinds of mental images of what Haruhi might be like in different times and places... On a related note, I'm mildly irritated at myself for taking until near the end of Chapter chapter 3 to figure out that this wasn't taking place during the mid 2000s... The factory job, World War II taking place 30 years ago (that one really sounds have clued me in but at the time it blew right past me...), nothing really showed it in my face until all the caste system class warfare stuff started getting brought up. Until that point I just thought the change was his family being poor. Excellent story, I wish you were still writing, or, if you are, that I knew where you were posting. I hope you're having a good life regardless, this talent deserves it.

Superb piece. This is my first time hearing of the Burakumin. I was aware there was discrimination in Japan, especially against foreigners, but against their own people...? That was quite a surprise. Still, it's an important social issue to be confronted. Unfortunately discrimination exists in 2015, and recent events around the world have proved correctly that the world is still not an accepting place. I cheered when Haruhi came in and stood up for Kyon's honor. That was a great part on its own. Shunning people because of being perceived different is never right, and I'm glad you decided to address this difficult issue.

This is great!

I'm going to have to check out more Haruhi Suzumiya fanfics. This is the second REALLY good one that I've found, tonight. Well, this morning.

You really are such a good writer.

You conveyed the emotions of the main characters exceedingly well here. I think it helps that in this case not having much idea about Japanese culture and history except from common media and WW2 history at school allows the prejudice against Burakumin to hit home so hard. There are no pre-existing ideas or opinions that I have been exposed to specifically relating to this specific prejudice and that makes this vastly more powerful for me. I don't know if that is a sad commentary on the way my mind works but this story made me FURIOUS for Kyon, as well as sympathetic and melancholic at different points.

Whatever the reason, you managed to write a really emotive piece here. Whilst I am a fan of Kyon BDH it has the same problems shared with fics like the now (in)famous 'In Flight', of excellent writing, marred by the episodic nature of writing a chapter at a time. Also lacking sufficient direction and the time (usually after a first draft) where you hand your manuscript to your agent and they say: great, now cut out half of it. On the other hand, since this has a much smaller range of topics and events to cover it feels much more cohesive and readable. If I were to use the same comparison to Gabriel Blessing's works that I did earlier then it would be similar to 'Debt of a Sword'.

To summarise; a thoroughly enjoyable read with powerful emotions and well fleshed out characters. The slow start is somewhat annoying initially, but is perfectly justified to set things up for later revelations and sow the seeds of the tumultuous sea of emotions I (and hopefulyl others) went through reading it. I couldn't think of a better way to do it, that's for sure.

wow, I loved this. I've heard about the Korean minority before but never about the Barukumin, so that in itself was really interesting to find out about. After finish reading this I found out that my eyes had glossed over with near-tears since the second chapter without me consciously realizing o_o you do subtle emotions and relationships so well. I especially loved how Haruhi reacts to Kyon throughout the fic and especially the end. Haruhi following Kyon would seem almost cliche but the way you delivered it had me really glued to the screen reading this.

could you provide a link to your website on your author's page please?

Thank you for writing!

An extraordinary story this one is :)

You were the one who wrote in your dreams as well no? (I could tell because the higurashi kenichi laywer uncle, and the style of writing.) Sir or mz. All I have to say is you are the best haruhi author I've seen. Other than the original of course. And in third place for fanfiction author. Only overdone by two bleach storys. And I look forward to the continuation if this. It is even better than in your dreams. And the theme and tone is the haruhi novels for the first time again. Hell you should call Japan a.d ask if you. An take over the series from them, seeing how they are done with it and all... (Mega super sad face at that.) If they say no, well you have at least one fan who would like to see. Where you go with this. :)

An excellent piece, and like "At a Glance" its subtle character tensions were superb. No over dramatic declarations of strife, no cheesy floral descriptions of angst, just the slow, sinking feeling of despair creeping in.

And also like your other works, it leaves me simultaneously satisfied and wistful for a sequel.

Props!

This story almost made me tear up. It was that good.

I'm not sure what time period this is supposed to take place in, or some of the terms you used (though I do like how you referenced some elements from K:BDH). What I do know is that this is awesome, and what Haruhi did was the best possible way to end the story.

I think there are more than a few readers, myself included, who know what its like to be an outcast in your school, and though I was an outcast for different reasons than Kyon here, his mindset seems very genuine to me. Well done.

As always, this is the amazing quality of writing I have come to expect from you. When I realized where you intended to take the story I was happily intrigued, and getting to the end I felt the very rare satisfaction I get from only from reading a truly well crafted tale.

The most impressive part of the story is that you managed to make me truly curious at what would happen to all of the characters going forward, while still resolving all the key plot lines in an enjoyable fashion. Something that truly separates the good stories from the great ones.