This was a pleasure to read! I really liked that you placed it in the future and had the X-Men themes so prevalent, but with only minimal mention of the X-Men themselves. It really allowed you to interact more with your original characters and follow along with the situation they were in.

Excellent job! :)

~ Satori Blackthorn

Wonderful story. :)

I really enjoyed this story. I liked the unique perspective, not only from a non-mutant, but from a kid caught in the middle. Very good. _

Man this is an awsome story! any chance on a follow up? well anywayz keep up the good work m8 your pretty damn good

this was wonderful.

*blinks* Wow... That was a gorgeous piece. *slight smile* I'm glad it turned out like this. I thought for sure she really was gonna jump, and die. It's cheering to read a story where things start to work out in the end, without all hope being crushed...

I love the way you did your chars. They felt very real- i felt like I could understand them, that they'd been speaking to me on a simple level- and I love how you showed that the main char had trouble with his doubts. It's all very oddly human. ... *winces* and the other comment was true too. Humanity always singles out someone as a scapegoat. *sighs, stretching* Bah.. I'd write more, but I gotta go to sleep... heh. baibai.

Alara, I love your characterisation. They're so well-rounded and real.

Very nice. I like Common People stories. This one is great.

wow... that is just utterly fantastic.

oh it was sooooo good! I wish you'd make a sequel where he sees eve again just to know if she's doing good at xavier's school and see how they both evolved. but anyway this story was really great!

LOL! I read this piece through and thought to myself, "Well, fairly trite message, but very nicely conveyed. Characters look and felt real. It moved well. Dialog wasn't awkward. Had a nice sense of closure at the end, and it really made you feel sympathetic for the narrator. I really like this. I need to praise this new writer. Right now."

Then I noticed that it was by Alara Rogers. Right: as though you could create a story which didn't contain all the strengths listed above! Good to see you at work, and hope to see more new material with time. Good luck with that mega-website, too, assuming it takes off, soon. :)

Lovely, Alara. :-)