Reviews for Unexpected
MARDONSGT chapter 17 . 7/6
Awesome story, thank you for sharing.
Guest chapter 17 . 7/5
who was the wolf animagus on Elaina's wall? Harry's form was a Black Panther.
Guest chapter 17 . 6/24
nice love this story
Guest chapter 17 . 6/18
I really, really enjoyed the end. Epiloge of birth and the beginning of their lives at Hogwarts... most fictions don't have an end, or a crappy end. Yours was wonderful.

The only flaw in your fiction was that it was a bit illogical (Harry meets girls, girls get pregnant, he learns that he is a Lord, 24h later he loves them, 48h later Harry has learnd everything there is to be a Lord from Daphne, ...) and that there weren't enough lemons for my taste. A lemon of Susan, and the three Chasers would have been great, you just mentioned that there was something kinky going on, nothing more, althrough more lemons of Hermione, Daphne and Alex wouldn't have been wrong either, escpecially Harry in panther animagus form with wolf Alex and jaguar Hermione. Why did you give them animagus forms if there was no need for them in your story... escpecially 'natural animagus', there is no such thing, but in your story Harry and Hermione were natural animagi with no need for training, so there could have been a lemon between two felines immediatly after chapter 14... but there wasn't. :(
Guest chapter 10 . 6/18
'I needed to add something to brighten the mood'?! Well, a lemon with Susan, Hermione, Alex or Daphne (again) would have been 1000 times better than a stupid mock duel in the middle of Gringotts between Harry and Remus.
Futhermore, if I remember correctly, magic use in Gringotts is forbidden, so the real duel between Harry and Alexs guardian is illogical.
Guest chapter 9 . 6/18
I am a bit confused again. Yesterday Harry didn't know that he was a Lord (even Dora didn't know?! Wtf?!) and now he knows all laws including searching the Vault of Bellatrix? I find that hard to believe. Yesterday he was stupid and ignorant and today smart and well informed...
Furthermore, the Goblins are too nice to the wizards to my liking.
And yesterday he blabbles about living through the war and enjoying life, etc. and today he talks about dying 'for the greater good' wihout trying? Wtf? The easiest solution is to destroy all soul pieces exept his and then somehow capture Tom after killing all Death Eaters. And when he dies of old age Tom will die as well. Another solution would be to let Hermione do her research to remove it without dying. Another solution would be to fight Tom with all he has, if he dies trying...
That a simple spell fired by Bill got rid of it is too easy and illogical. Furthermore, it wasn't sure if he survives, if he died, Tom would have won, to trust Bill so easily is simply dumb.
Guest chapter 6 . 6/18
Hmm, the idea and the writing is great, but I am confused. It sounds like Harry met Susan and Daphne for the first time the day before. He shaked their hands to introduce himself, that got them pregnant, he was on Hermiones side the whole time and slept with her in the hospital bed, the next day they learn of their pregnancy and he kisses them, and now at the end of the day he loves them so extremly...
Sounds all a bit rushed. Susan and Daphne are hot, seem nice and the baby thing is heartwarming, but Harry doesn't know shit about them. For all he knows, Daphne could be a Death Eater out to kill him and Susan could want his money... all he knows are their patronus forms, how they kiss and that they hold his children...

Whatever, must be a magic thing that he can trust and love them without knowing them. It is your fiction... ;)
gwb620 chapter 17 . 6/14
This was really well done, I enjoyed the from start to finish.
ARega1s chapter 17 . 5/7
An excellent little story.
lilashannah chapter 17 . 4/24
I enjoyed your story. Thanks for sharing.
Guest chapter 1 . 3/16
im cringing too hard to read further, sorry.
The Ghostly Minion chapter 1 . 2/9
This is an interesting riff on sixth year and the sixth year conundrum. I see one large conceptual hole in this idea, which is that the Runes professor is remiss in allowing them to do what they did. Certainly the potential for pregnancy should have been well known and warned against.

Still, an interesting start.
deadsnakebiting chapter 17 . 2/3
You wrote a very good story and I thank you for sharing it with me. You kept the plot going well and threw in surprises here and there. I was an English major in college so I picked up on a lot of spelling and sentence structure errors. Not as many as some but still worse than many other writers. I did like that you afforded Snape the opportunity to confront Voldemort at the end and tell Voldemort his actions were not a betrayal to Voldemort, rather his actions were a payback for Voldemort's betrayal to him. This is one of the few (if any) stories that has given Snape that opportunity. Overall, a solid B, maybe an A- since it was your first Fan Fiction story!
andyjhorton chapter 10 . 1/9
man that was a great ending to the chapter. some of the quick to marriage relationships feel too quick. but other than that this is a good fic.
WarLock571 chapter 17 . 12/5/2015
I loved this story; but what happened to Molly, Ron, Ginny, and Dumbledore
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