|Reviews for Otherside|
| Kageyjay chapter 1 . 12/31/2012
The errors made it hard to read, and I almost stopped. But, I like your take on this moment, and it's good enough that I kept reading.
| jkt7 chapter 1 . 12/4/2012
Many thanks. I always wanted to know what he was thinking right here.
| WritingElephant chapter 1 . 10/12/2012
That was really well done. I hope you write some other something else from edwards perspective.
| Guest chapter 1 . 9/8/2012
Well done! The only thing I suggest chaning is the third scentance of the sixth paragraph. The "wince" breaks up the scentance in an akward way that is inconsistant with the mood of the peice. Try using a dash intead.
ex. Intead of "Bella, wince," try "Bella-..." or some variation thereof to indicate a finching reaction to the name rather than actually stating it.
| Team Edward Rules All chapter 1 . 9/6/2012
| nepalipranshu chapter 1 . 9/6/2012
I love Edward's head! The inside and outside! Great job :)
| Sweetie7smiled chapter 1 . 9/6/2012
This is neat! Thanks for writing!
| Ur fan chapter 1 . 9/6/2012
is it wierd i found this more romantic then depressing?