|Reviews for Shirley's day off|
| ShadowFreddyRaven chapter 1 . 1/22/2013
| Asukaforever92 chapter 1 . 9/19/2012
Not bad but a few things: one is some grammar mistakes and while I'm no expert there either there were some obvious ones. Maybe consider a beta reader they can be really helpful. Second, the story seemed fragmented just skipping two weeks and it skips from Minna walking away to her making Shirley cleaning Hartmann's room for no reason. Plot holes aren't good. I did enjoy your story and I don't want to come off as being mean I'm just offering some criticism.
| big fan chapter 1 . 9/12/2012
this very funny keep up the good work, and never give up :)
| dark hero chapter 1 . 9/11/2012
LoL very funny
| black cat chapter 1 . 9/10/2012
very funny, i like the part when hartman said what the hell happen to her room. keep it up
| Guest chapter 1 . 9/10/2012
to kat man.
your grammar bad too.
| kat man chapter 1 . 9/9/2012
funny but you need to work on your gramer a bit more