|Reviews for The New King and The Old King|
| Raina1 chapter 1 . 12/5/2013
And I sincerely hope there's more where this has come from!
| Hey chapter 1 . 2/27/2013
Just started reading your fic and I can honestly say it's been the most entertaining past time since I saw the lack of good fiction on this category. I encourage you to continue this fic because I see no sense in writing it only to drop it for months. And (out of curiosoty) I see that you update this other story, but not this. Maybe when you have the time, you can make another chapter for this. I mean, if the wait is going to be months at a time, might as well have to published chapters out to keep the readers occupied.
Signed, LoveMonkey (Lol)
| lurking reviewer chapter 1 . 1/25/2013
I'm desperate to read the second chapter! DX
| JediForceMan chapter 1 . 12/24/2012
Lelouch better get some answers from c.c.- and fast! Because it sounds to me like things are gonna hit the fan real bad.
| wolfnagi chapter 1 . 12/9/2012
Rolo is such a bastard.
Lelouch is sooooo screwed.
And Shirley? Well, Shirley is just alive. Which is good for the romance aspect of the story.
But do you have any intention of updating this? I'm not saying this in a mean way, just asking.
But whether you do or not, this story was fun to read.
| Yukisisren chapter 1 . 12/5/2012
Nice. Good job.
| RandomNumbers523156 chapter 1 . 11/28/2012
Ah, a Lelouch/Shirley fic with potential! I hope this can be a good read, I wonder how Shirley surviving will change Lelouch's plans and it seems that Lelouch tapped with forces beyond his comprehension, or is it? Anyway, keep going!
| ShirLuluFan5Eva chapter 1 . 11/26/2012
It's 12:40 pm and I'm writing this in the back of my Calc class. Anyways, This was an excellent story and you should make more of this.
Signing out, yo!
| Translucent Liar chapter 1 . 11/24/2012
So Lulu manages to save Shirley from her inevitable death and he gains a new power? Sweet. I guess this means he can heal people with mortal wounds. But I wonder what C.C. will have to say about it. And judging from the summary, it won't be good news. But who cares! Shirley is alive and that's all that matters at the moment. Just as long as that weasle Rolo doesn't get word of her survival, nothing wrong can possibly happen. (Cue the optimism!)
| ThreetieTweenie chapter 1 . 11/24/2012
This story was most enjoyable to read. I loved reading every sentence. But there were a few that really caught my attention:
(Without much relent, he crashed his head into the tiled ground, the loud thud popped in and out of existence like the drop of a pin nail. Again, he slammed his head against the tarnished spot stained with his own blood that splattered after the collisions.) First of all, may I just say, "ouch!" Secondly, I can't imagine the pent up frustration and sorrow that made him react the way he did.
("Sure thing!" Rolo raised his arm in salute, as if he had completed a fine mission, before excusing himself towards the main entrance. Lelouch released his façade and spit the blood-stained saliva at the ground.) I friggin hated the little tool in the anime. And the way you portrayed his reactions, acting like he did the best thing for his "brother", made me want to spit in disgust as well.
(He looked up from the escalator's entrance to see Rolo overhead, waving to him with an innocent smile planted on his face. It chilled and enraged Lelouch to see Shirley's very murderer retaining his naïve persona.) Made me hate him also.
(Instantly, he forced all of his pent-up frustration and sorrow behind a deafening scream that barreled unheard throughout the building. The howl lasted longer once he uncoiled from himself to shout to the heavens, through the grotesque glass piece overhead mocked him in the place of God. His hands took hold of his own hair since they could not grasp the very neck of the cruel deity above.) This paragraph was so evoking because it's a thought that goes through the minds of those in great depression. You can practically hear Lelouch thinking this.
("I order you, don't die Shirley! Respond to me! Take one more breath, move an arm, hit me, call me an idiot, kill me, anything! Show me that you're still here!") My feels. Sob.
I have more that I would like to quote, but then I'd have to copy and paste the whole story onto the review box. Lol.
So should I expect a chapter 2 soon? Preferrable before Christmas. That would make me really happy.
| Meagan D chapter 1 . 11/24/2012
OMG. This was sooo depressing. But at least Shirley is going to live through it. Phew!
I'm actually really curious about this new "geass" you were alluding to in this chapter. Sounds to me like it'll be one of those things that becomes more than Lelouch bargained for.
I'm also curious if Lelouch will allow Shirley to join the Black Knights or decide to push her away for her own good.
Whatever you have planned for this I will support 100%
| Guest chapter 1 . 11/23/2012
This was supa good!
I'm glad I was recommended to this.
Hopefully you'll write more for this.
| breathe EM P T Y chapter 1 . 11/22/2012
I was looking arounf for a good (or, at least, DECENT) fanfic of Lelouch x Shirley when I came across yours.
And before I read something, I usually look at the number of reviews and the kinds of comments, being good or bad, that are made. So I gave the reviews a once over and found them to be satisfactory. But reading your story was more than what they reviewers lead me to believe. You, sir (or ma'am), made me wanting more of this. I was truly in awe by what you wrote and I couldn't believe my eyes that there was only one chapter out.
I know you said on your A/N that this was on the bottom of your priority list, but I strongly urge you to reconsider that thought. What you have here is a potentially good story with substance. And the fact that you aren't planning to update this regulary (or much) disheartens me greatly. THIS is the kind of work I've been looking to read. So don't let this fic of yours stay as it is- a one chapter story. Give the ShirLulu community something to look forward to. Honestly.
You have a good number of reviewers that want to see more, myself included. But if that doesn't give you the needed inspiration to continue this, then, by all means, let my cyber buddies change your mind. Yeah, that's right, I plan to inform my friends about this story and MAKE them review this. I'm not sure if any of them have accounts on this site (and I hope that doesn't bother you), but I guarantee you that once they read this they will make accounts just to keep track of this little gem here.
So I hope that after ten or so more reviews you'll have another chapter out soon.
Sincerly, breath Y
| sAkurabLade chapter 1 . 11/20/2012
Hook. Line. Sinker. I am impressed. Nuff said.
| Fullmetal Angel 17 chapter 1 . 11/12/2012
I gotta say, I haven't been this intrigued with a fic of yours since "Surety". The last ShirLulu story was downright riveting, suspenseful, and full of ten kinds of hawtness (wink, wink). Honestly, I wasn't sure if your next story was going to come to par with it. But this first chapter just tells me that I shouldn't doubt your writing abilities. Even if it wasn't much, you managed to convey a lot of the emotions Lelouch was feeling during the moments that Shirley was dying.
Overall, I was very pleased. And I'd write you a long review (like I've done with your other fic), detailing every aspect of the story that either satisfied or made me question something, but time is not on my side at the moment. So I'll leave you with this final comment: UPDATE! LIKE NOW!