|Reviews for The 73rd Annual Hunger Games|
| Little Misses chapter 3 . 2/6
Write more it is an amazing Story
| foal1011606 chapter 2 . 7/5/2013
I really like this story so far! I'm afraid I have no tributes to offer, but I just wanted to say that I liked it .
| I am Grace daughter of Apollo chapter 1 . 10/15/2012
that cool, you should definitely write more
| Purplelover6606 chapter 1 . 10/9/2012
i hate what u said about that paedy hat wasnt dat good ether
| Anla'shok chapter 1 . 9/11/2012
The narrative voice is powerful. I think that's the most important thing in a story except the actual content, but it's too early for me to judge that.
Since you did ask for constructive criticism, I have a few things to point out.
The descriptive bit about her looks is a bit contrived (I mean, who stops to think about the way they look?), I'd have preferred to see her lift something heavy without grunting or something like that to show she was muscular, or have her say she's her father's favorite daughter because she favors her mother's hair and eyes.
It's the same things two paragraphs above with the brother/sisters bit. It's a list. Can't her sister hand her something and she almost trip on the twins or something like that to show she has siblings? I find it much more interesting that just been told.
That piece about Effie, saying she's horrible for an escort, what does it mean? What does your narrator dislike? Is it the fact she pretends the Games are an exciting thing? Because I guess all escorts have to do that or Snow would have their hide.
Otherwise, it's good enough I'm interested to see the rest
| ovoxogang chapter 1 . 9/10/2012
This looks promising. You have grammar mistakes, but other than that this sounds good so far! Keep writing :)