|Reviews for The Park|
| natashasurgirl chapter 1 . 4/16/2013
First some concrit.
Since it was a hot day, the grass of the park was being wet every 30 minutes, so they were bound to make us wet.
This sentence sounds strange for some reason. I think you meant to mention a sprinkler? The repeated word, wet, in the same sentence sounds strange.
I said, standing up and helping her standing up.
And I think the second standing was meant to be stand?
Other than those two things that stood out to me, I really enjoyed your one-shot. This fic is so sweet and makes my little heart swell. I love how you always bring out Mamoru's romantic side!
| LoveInTheBattleField chapter 1 . 9/11/2012
This was sweet.
| Hito me Bore chapter 1 . 9/11/2012
It is against the rules to post script formatted dialogue. Please edit this, or you will be reported. It's nothing personal, but everyone needs to follow the rules.