Reviews for The Park
natashasurgirl chapter 1 . 4/16/2013
First some concrit.

Since it was a hot day, the grass of the park was being wet every 30 minutes, so they were bound to make us wet.

This sentence sounds strange for some reason. I think you meant to mention a sprinkler? The repeated word, wet, in the same sentence sounds strange.

I said, standing up and helping her standing up.

And I think the second standing was meant to be stand?

Other than those two things that stood out to me, I really enjoyed your one-shot. This fic is so sweet and makes my little heart swell. I love how you always bring out Mamoru's romantic side!
LoveInTheBattleField chapter 1 . 9/11/2012
This was sweet.
Hito me Bore chapter 1 . 9/11/2012
It is against the rules to post script formatted dialogue. Please edit this, or you will be reported. It's nothing personal, but everyone needs to follow the rules.

Thank you.