|Reviews for In Time of Need|
| ThatOneGuy44 chapter 5 . 9/12/2013
I really enjoyed reading this! Their interactions were sweet, their behavior and the plot in general was believable, and I like your writing style a lot, and the story flows really well. Here's hoping that there is someday more!
| Datten chapter 5 . 7/5/2013
This is the best VG fanfic ever.
| Guest chapter 5 . 1/2/2013
please don't stop writing this story is great
| AzureAzoth chapter 5 . 10/25/2012
I love your story, and style of writing. Can't wait for the rest.
| eddy chapter 5 . 10/1/2012
fantastic story waitini on the next
| Lolwut8898 chapter 5 . 9/19/2012
And I'll hold you to the rest of this wonderful story.
| XxCRITICxX chapter 5 . 9/14/2012
Aww aeris is already moving back? Well, I haven't seen a new vgcats story in a while, so I say yay!
| XxCRITICxX chapter 4 . 9/14/2012
Haha they're suspicious of their parents when their parents should be suspicious of them!
| XxCRITICxX chapter 3 . 9/14/2012
| XxCRITICxX chapter 2 . 9/14/2012
Oh rainbow six is a good game!
| XxCRITICxX chapter 1 . 9/14/2012
Haha "you two can sleep in the same room, but KEEP THE DOOR OPEN
| Deep Sea Anchor chapter 5 . 9/13/2012
Alright, I read this all in one morning and I must say, I am impressed.
What I would first like to point out are your characters interactions. They're some of the best I've seen on this website. That isn't a compliment I'd give out lightly, so my hat's off to you.
Next I would like to point out the plot itself. The idea is new, this alone is commendable. But what makes it better is that you've presented your dramatic moments it in such a way as to waylay the sensation of self-pity. The moments feel genuine, and I would attribute that to the fact that you don't turn things into something they aren't, but at the same time you give each moment enough significance to propel your characters into what they need to do.
Now the relationship that you've placed between Leo and Aeris is much lighter than many of the other stories here. Something I've discussed with some of the other writers is that we each seem to have our own little "versions" of Leo and Aeris, stressing certain personality traits to suit our stories. I like your versions. I'd like to say that we haven't seen them like this before and once again the change is refreshing.
Now if I was to make a recommendation, it would be that when you have a character speak and then you describe the actions of another character, unless what they're doing is connected to the speech or thought, separate the two lines. Doing otherwise can lead to a bit of ambiguity as to who is doing what.
Outside of that, both your format and grammar is indeed commendable. It flowed nicely and the image came smoothly to my mind, with rare interruptions.
You obviously have talent. This is a fine piece here. I believe that's enough said.
| Rocket117 chapter 5 . 9/12/2012
Some of the stuff gets confusing as it's a little to fast, and I end up reading back a couple of lines. Most likely that's just me though (I tend to read fast and skip important things)
Other then that, It's a great story, good transitions and, I really shouldn't have to say this but there are so many stories with bad grammar, this one has great grammar, awesome use of words and synonyms and all that jazz.
I happily await the next chapter good sir.
| IeatDeadpeople chapter 1 . 9/12/2012
Great job, Indeed. You have a good idea with this and i really like where this is going. The story is straight to the point, no fancy dialogs or events, i like that. Simple things work the best, remember that. I'm looking forward for the next chapter. Wish you good luck and an open mind while writing.