|Reviews for Effloresco Secundus|
| Paty S chapter 5 . 8/7
Naruto and sasuke discussions always bring a smile to my face.
Sakura and Kakshi discussion is very true and most kids seeem to think being a shinobi is all about fun and fighting but don't think about the consequences of that fighting and other problems...there still young but in this world they grow up faster than most of the HP kids.
That line about the more serious things coming left me nervous..
| Paty S chapter 4 . 8/7
Shikamaru is one of smartest people in this world but his laziness doesn't allow him to improve, only when he wants.
It's nice to see Sakura keep recording and preserving her memories or her previous life. I do wonder if her reincarnation had something to do with her father dead..
| Paty S chapter 3 . 8/7
Sakura is really smart when it comes to this exercises and learning but she really wants to be recognized and make friends with her team.
Sasuke and Naruto seem to maintain the same personality but I'm seeing more improvement in there bonding with Sakura and there reactions to her.
I feel bad for Naruto because I understand why he behaves and eats the way be does.. I was surprised this establishment employer's didn't go around whispering about him.
| Paty S chapter 2 . 8/7
I got say I'm really liking this crossover, there's many out there but most or not has intriguing an well written has yours.
Sakura/Hermione is definitely an interesting character and I wonder if she reincarnated in Sakura when she was young or she was born this way with her previous life memories.
I like how you maintain the story but change some things to fit Hermione personality.
| Sasha chapter 1 . 7/26
Okay, I just read your story... and I have to greatly disagree with two of the negative reviews given below. At least go past the first few chapters! There are lots of ways of storytelling and not everything has to be said in the very first chapter! Some things work better as a build up... and oh boy does she do a good job of the reveals. I had my heart beating like a hammer when Sakura/Hermione first come across magic. Yes, I did spoil it... but I mean, read a bit and wait for the reveal yea? Harry potter cross-over... you're guaranteed some kind of magic, no duh.
I don't mean to attack the reviewers... but at least be patient and read. If you think it doesn't grab you right away then move on. You'll most likely come back to this bloody awesome fic.
I'm not going to enter the military Hermione argument, because some other reviewer addressed it... She's been through war, prolonged war even AFTER voldemort died... things you would have found out if you had read a fair bit. Give it a chance guys, its amazing!
Im doing blatant promotion of this story... but I just finished reading this story and I am totally and utterly in love with it. I wonder if there is something as similar as this out there? Gotta love Hermione all around.
| twinbuster2 chapter 10 . 7/26
I just noticed the review left by lightning bandit, and I was horrified. I have nothing against said reviewer as everyone is entitled to their own opinion and said reviewer at least was inclined to leave a review BUT THAT REVIEWER COULD NOT BE MORE WRONG ABOUT YOUR STORY! Excuse the caps please, but I felt nothing else could convey my sentiments more. Your story has a mature outlook that builds slowly but with suspense. You kept me at the edge of my seat guessing at what was going to happen next.
It's easy to see that this Hermione is a survivor of a war that continued even after the opposing leader died. You even highlighted these happenings in flashbacks.
Admittedly I'm curious as to what happened the day Hermione arrived and I can't wait for the reveal.
I have absolutely loved your story plot and the real relationship of the 'trio' even more than the original naruto team mechanics. I hope you continue and I really can't wait until you update. I want to see if Itachi makes it into the picture.
this is my third reason through, so under the risk of repeating myself please update soon
| Guest chapter 30 . 7/22
You're not paying attention to the two idiots below me, right? Who reviews a longfic after one/a handful of chapters? and I don't get why certain reviewers feel the need to say that they're not going to continue reading bc the story wasn't what theeeey wanted. These are the ppl who should read those reviewer etiquette posts floating around reddit and tumblr.
Got here from reddit, they recommended this story as one of the best nto/hp stories. No regrets, read the whole thing in one go :) :) :)
| Brandstone chapter 6 . 7/22
I have to agree with pretty much everything the reviewer The Lightning Bandit said.
This story has so much potential, but you ignored all the things about it that could be interesting.(See The Lightning Bandit's review, to lazy to type all of what he said when I agree with it.)
So far the story is just kinda boring. I don't think I will continue to read, it is making me doze off.
Good luck in the future.
| Guest chapter 30 . 7/20
I wish you'd do a chapter with Jiraiya's pov or maybe tsunade or Kakashi again :)
| The Lightning Bandit chapter 1 . 7/20
This is such a interesting concept but I am really disappointed with how you chose to execute this. You just drop us into Hermione being Sakura years after many of the interesting things have happened. Sakura's life is currently boring and uninteresting. (And Sakura's life will stay that way until at least the first C-Rank mission. With the possible exception of the bell test..)
You skipped over the incredibly interesting question of 'why does Hermione choose to become a shinobi?' Canon Hermione would abhor becoming a trained assassin in a military dictatorship. Yet this one has nothing to say on the issue except that she's taking training very seriously. Don't get me wrong, I don't think that Hermione couldn't under any circumstances become a shinobi. I think she could, especially if she realized that Shinobi are the only ones who learn how to use chakra (basically magic) and therefor the shinobi arts might be her only ticket home. But what thought process made her choose this difficult dangerous path?
When did Hermione leave her world? How did she leave it? How old was she? Does she want to go back? Can Hermione still do magic? All of these things are completely absent from this first chapter. Instead we get some boring conversation with kids. We know that an adult sees children arguing as dumb. Nobody finds that interesting or surprising. If Hermione remembers her past life of course she wouldn't be bothered by some children.
The concept for this is so cool. But the execution is very dull. Stories should focus on character development and the unusual parts of the protagonists life. That's my opinion. This story so far falls far short of it's potential. I might keep reading. I'm really not sure.
I hope you don't take this review as mean-spirited. I don't mean it that way. You have written a lot, and I'm sure you put a lot of effort and time into this hobby. I don't want to be rude. I just typed what I honestly think.
| Bob Schwartz chapter 5 . 7/18
Good fic, I like it so far!
| docfrodo2 chapter 1 . 7/11
| randompizza7 chapter 30 . 7/11
This is a very well written story. Keep up the good work.
| Wolf Guard Miestwin chapter 6 . 7/10
Saske with cucumber and that context made ma laugh more than it should. But it still felt good.
| EmiliaKyuchi chapter 30 . 7/10
Nice work on the chapter!