|Reviews for Unwavering Sky|
| Me chapter 1 . 3/1
Just read your profile. Whichever one of you wrote that rant on Naruto - If I could, I'd give you to Nobel literature prize. You clearly possess insight beyond 99.99% of humanity, and such talent must be recognized.
| entelejent chapter 13 . 2/17
Action's rare, not like it could really be otherwise for this story, so the fic doesn't appeal to me all that much; but it's very, very good. I know little about Sekirei, I haven't read the manga or seen the anime or gone into that fanfic section yet, but I'll be surprised if this isn't the top fic or at worst one of the top fics in that section.
Complaints are fairly small:
-Naruto's history and personality are too unknown. He's a powerful being that's lived for a long time going through different lives. But as things stand, it seems as if desired events and styles of life have just been inserted willy-nilly. It's not that thought hasn't been put into his past, but that past appears to be comprised of dots and bare segments, not longer lines or more-dimensional stories. Various sensible emotions are invoked, but that's not enough. If his life's a huge canvas, then his recollections have focused on coloring parts of it without having the final picture planned, or even often looking to see whether different parts go together; instead the artists assume the canvas is big enough to fit everything that's wanted.
-Kind of drags on everywhere. The viewpoints and different flavors are great. But it often feels like things could be condensed into more flavor in a smaller bite. Try expressing personalities and thoughts together more, both would be enhanced while words needed would be reduced. It's better written than most fics, but I'm nitpicking, 'kay? Could well be the action withdrawal complaining here.
| Shattering chapter 13 . 2/9
Are you going to continue or is this story abandoned?
| Darkth Shadow chapter 13 . 1/23
This is an awesome story!
| Q.Q chapter 13 . 1/15
I do hope this is not the last chapter. You two make an amazing duo.
Thanks for putting in the effort either way,
| InflatedChimp chapter 13 . 1/14
I like :)
| Googlemo chapter 8 . 1/7
Well this is a bit of badend, I mean making him Immortal and sekirei mortal, cause they can't have real relationship being so unenquel. The whole point is to make his strength making them as undying as he is.
| Googlemo chapter 6 . 1/7
I like your version much more than the of Engulfing darkness... his is too cheesy. Your Naruto is amazing...
| TnnSTyAchSTheDoctor chapter 13 . 1/5
Really great so far. My only question is if anyone notices how Miya basically kicked Naruto out of his own house.
| Im Not Itachi chapter 13 . 1/5
So... what happened to Yashima?
I know authors usually don't like people asking this question, but with the length of time in place I feel the need. Are you going to be continuing this story? One of you has supposedly moved to a different area which would probably make joint writing a little hard. Just curious.
| Minato 1 chapter 13 . 1/3
Dude plz plz and plz dnt even think of stopping this fanfic coz it is totally upload soon.
| blazedflame chapter 13 . 12/24/2013
Are you still going to continue this story? Pls continue. Even once a month for an update will suffice.
| TheClownKing chapter 13 . 12/23/2013
Are you guys done with this story? Cause I gotta say I have no idea where you are going with this one anymore. For one thing I am curious what you guys flipped a coin over, cause I have been waiting since that incident a few chapters ago for you guys to touch more on the Tsukiumi issue. Particularly, a line in this chapter jumped out at me, "To borrow Miya's quote, I cannot punish someone who doesn't understand the significance
of his actions."...So what the hell did he do to Tsukiumi? I gotta say, plot device aside you guys butchered her character in that interaction. Tsukiumi is a prideful creature yes, but possibly above that she is honorable. If refusing to outnumber her opponents, insisting that she they stand guard over their fallen opponents, and even inane little things like having her racing "duels" with Musubi to be beside Minato instead of simply fighting over it doesnt spell that out I dont know what will. Even than that the episode with her adjuster showed that at best she is a young woman that fears the idea of being dominated fully by a man, mainly due to a lack of understanding. How you guys could gather from all that, that she would kill a child for touching her and even showing repentance, rather blew my mind. Then Naruto goes on to mentally assault her, essentially a child herself in the ways of the world, and has the audacity to spit out a line like that a couple chapters later? After leaving her broken and alone for any vulture to do what they will to her? Nonsense. Since that incident I have been trying to piece together where you guys were going with it, the guy picking her up and taking care of her and such. I have even held out some hope that it was Naruto using a clone, particularly since Tsukiumi remembered him after going feral, something Naruto pointed out was a trait of Sekirei reacting to him. Though the guy remarked picking her up in a forest and has been surprisingly uninvolved if it were to be Naruto. Honestly she is one of the Sekirei that I am particularly fond of, Matsu being another but all hope for her was lost long ago being winged already. I was anticipating seeing her involved in the story until it actually happened. Around that chapter actually you guys took Naruto in quite a heavier, darker direction, not sure why. Anyway, that's why I'm curious about this flipped coin deal. To be clear this isn't an attack on you guys or anything. This is a review pure and simple, I like this story for the most part, outside of the things i specifically mentioned. I also enjoy reading End Game R, you guys have an interesting and enjoyable writing style in general. I'm not the kind of guy to review every chapter with "OMG so good please update", I particularly review when I want to voice my opinion about something that has a strong impact on me. Good or bad, that's how I am.
| TheKnightsOfNi chapter 1 . 12/21/2013
awesome I hope you can update this fanfiction sometime it's most impressive :)
| Sceonn chapter 13 . 12/20/2013
Oohhh...WTF? xxxholic? Really?