Reviews for An Opportunity of Fate
I'MNOTCRAZY1 chapter 1 . 8/14/2013
This is so AU already that it's scary. Ayala doesn't have emotions, but is simply the collective of the human race's will to live. The Counter Force usually works through a normal human, empowering him or her enough to eliminate the threat to humanity. If that fails, the Counter Guardians get sent in and eliminate the target and anything associated with it.
GRoyale chapter 19 . 8/13/2013
I also don't like sharing ...
I personally cannot think of Sakura as a likeable character. Whenever i read about her, I only think she is scarier than bevore ... To be honest I dont mind her as a mere sidecharacter but as a main i can only feel pity(and slight fear) for her.

This whole "Sakura-needs-the-D" also starts to anoy me, it seems to be a (pathefic) for her to have sex with Shirou. I know how the worms in her body work but as far as i know she only gets really horny and does not need sex to survive ... and Shinji rapeing her has actually nothing to do with it(jealosy was his motive i think).

CG Arturia beeing his teacher is interesting
GRoyale chapter 10 . 8/12/2013
Oho, the story takes up speed and it starts rolling out, i like that!

So, Rin summonded Roland as Saber, didn't expect that, I thought it would be Rider, and Shinji got Caster.
And Psycho-Yandere-Dark-Sakura makes her entry ... she would make an amazing villian and she even works out of her free will WITH Zouken, but not against her friends. Let's see how possessive the new PYD-Sakura is.

Maybe this will work out into a Shirou-Rin-Ending/Pairing?
kyunaru chapter 2 . 8/11/2013
This would be a cool place to split with letting shorou keep the ether and fire talents it'd be cool to see something really original with shirous powers/talents
Jouaint chapter 23 . 8/6/2013
Magnificent story.
fanfic drawer chapter 23 . 7/30/2013
I see a love making scene coming soon least I hope. Can't wait to see how Shirou and the girls discuss their relationship. Also curious about Archer. Looking forward to more.
Bobboky chapter 23 . 7/30/2013
Very very good
ultima-owner chapter 23 . 7/30/2013
Zouken's death is a glorious event
aboulhosncc chapter 3 . 7/30/2013
I imagine this story as a train on rails. The plot is the train and the story is the rails. You have a good idea it seems like but your implementation seems to me like a train that got off the rails.

I just don't like how you are implementing the story. I dislike the idea that Alaya had so much of a hand in the salvation of shirou and his rescue.

I also didn't like how moved to tears shirou was over obviously fake silhouette of is former loved ones this shirou would be really a dead person in comparison to the emotions he showed.

What I had always imagined is Alaya was simply a type of computer program that runs when world ending events are happening and not so much a consciousness able to fully interact with all that happened.

This beginning could just have easily been about shirou getting fed up with this war and somehow trying to go back in time before the war starts to save it instead without this whishashy setup
Quathis chapter 23 . 7/30/2013
Wow! Quite the interlude. Zouken died in an interlude?! Did not expect that. Things are moving along pretty well for the big finale with Gilgamesh and the Grail. And Shirou is getting a harsh, but needed, battle scenario. Best way to get things through his hard head. Really excited for what else is to come. Until next time.
fanfic drawer chapter 22 . 7/14/2013
New reader. wasnt so sure about the new servants and their switched roles but you've written such a good romance story that each switched role really does play a role to the story other than the unbeaten path. This story falls well out of line with the original cannon but it so slowly that it's believable. i look forward to the seeing how the story comes together and hope the ending is a happy one for all
evilballoon chapter 22 . 7/12/2013
Thanks for another great chapter, lots of great things Excalibur awesomeness, Shirou's body isn't made out of blades!?, and EMIYA is not alone! Looking forwards to your next update!
Bobboky chapter 22 . 7/9/2013
very good work
mmsbddvr chapter 22 . 7/9/2013
You used a 40k references and killed my favorite Issei who wields eastern magic with one single paragraph. Joy has been denied to me.
Quathis chapter 22 . 7/8/2013
Sorry to hear you were sick, glad you're better.

The first time I read Emiya's scene, I thought it was Shirou's, and laughed at the connection. The actual follow up will likely be similar. Issai's moment turned ridiculously sour with Medusa getting him. Not sure what his fate will be, but I'm guessing Ayako will be pissed and wanting Gorgan mash. And Arturia officially enters the running on Shirou's heart. Slight lull right now, but looks like a much bigger conflict will be coming. Not to mention the battle alluded to at the Matou house. Greatly looking forward to it.

Until next time.
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