|Reviews for The Real Me|
| L0veB00ks chapter 43 . 1/10
Not only did I post a unfinished review thingy, I posted another without signing in... Shoot me in the face
| Guest chapter 43 . 1/8
...that wasn't supposed to happen, I sort of accidentally hit done and then send because I was typing so fast... Ummmmmmmm THATS NOT EMBARRASSING!... Well that never happened... LOVE YOUR STORY ALMOST AS MUCH AS BOOKS! *insert cheesy dis formed heart here*
| L0veB00ks chapter 43 . 1/7
NO NO NO ITS OKAI IF ITS MORE THAN 50 CHAPTERS! IT SHoULD BE EVEN MORE THAN 50 OH MY GOSH THERE IS NOTHING WR
| Kelly Herondale chapter 40 . 12/24/2013
| person chapter 12 . 12/23/2013
OMG this story is amazing!
| L0veB00ks chapter 42 . 12/15/2013
Hi so I would just like to comment on the fact that because you were the bigger person to that poop face, Jakual or something, you were just sort of freaking AMAZING! I MEAN BY THE ANGEL IT WAS SO AWESOME, AND THE BEST PART IS EVEN THOUGH YOU HANDLED IT PERFECTLY WITHOUT REALLY YELLING AT HER, YOU TOOOOLD HERR!
Hehe sorry, it was just awesome, LOOVED THE CHAPTER SO MUCH, I THOUGHT IT WAS PERF
| Guest chapter 42 . 12/13/2013
If people are doing that to you you should ignore them. That's cyberbullying which I believe is the most cruel form of cowardice. Take it from someone who's been bullied (a.k.a me). Bullying is the cause of cutting and more than 4, 400 suicides just this year. Bullies make me sick. Just keep writing your story. Its great and you yourself are doing great. I believe in you. P.S I can't wait for another chapter!
| L0veB00ks chapter 42 . 11/29/2013
THAY WAS AWESOME
IM SO EXCITED ABOUT THIS NEW FANFICTION YOU TALKEF ABOUT AND YOU ARE SO SWEET THANK YOU SOOOOO MUCH FOR DEDICATING THAT CHAPPY TO ME AND YOU ARE WONDERFUL AND IM GLAD YOU KEPT WRITING AND DIDNT LET THOSE MEAN PEOPLE GET TO YOU!
I might have spelled some of that wrong... Sorry if I did!
| Jakekul chapter 42 . 11/29/2013
If you read my review appropriately. You'd realize I asked you a question. That question being...
"Is this a Jace x OC story or not?"
The purpose or - should I say - the reason for this question obviously would be because I read the summary. Seeing as your summary says "JacexOC" and the fact that you DRAMATICALLY changed the mood of your story, made me question your direction. Because it PARTICULARLY says JACE and an OC not an OC and whomever. Again- all of this due to the dramatic change to your story...
One with an average I.Q. would have figured that out with common sense.
Care to try that again?
So to address you with proper criticism:
Just because you "planned" for your story to have a triangle. Doesn't mean you ignore the simple rule in creative writing called "Transition" and "Realism". Starting with Transition: you seemingly dropped Jace off the face if the earth with your writing. And have focused - literally - on Sebastian and Kat. Leaving your readers to assume that you no longer had any intention of keeping Jace as a main love interest. You need to LEARN to slowly ease "change" into your story. Not make a sudden change to the story. This mood change felt like when a person cuts you off on the highway when switching lanes, which inexplicably causes a pile-up car accident... Not good that your story is making people feel that way. Again- you need to EASE in the change. Example: keep Jace involved, keep Jace in Kat's thought's as well... Not make him disappear without explanation.
As for Reality. When a person is still in love with a person, they usually KNOW it. Even if they don't know it consciously, they do SUB-consciously. (Take up some research on the sub-consciousness) hence, random thoughts of the other "lover unknown" (Jace) will arise at the oddest of times. Or Kat could bring him up too much while with Sebastian. Despite, this being fiction, it has to be real or else it just sounds ridiculous.
Finally: the just because you planned on a 50 chapter story does not mean your story hasn't dragged on to the point of ridiculousness. Which leads to obviously why your readers forgot how Sebastian is specifically her STEPbrother not her actual brother. It's hard to remember everything when the story drags on and becomes less interesting. This also leads back to shitty transitions. If you presented this in a college fiction writing, class, they would feel that the story is becoming boring and overly dragged out. If you want a 50 chapter story- Great! But a 50 chapter story that drags on and takes forever to get to the Rising Action, Climax, and then Falling Action and then finally the Conclusion... Makes for a boring story and will lose your reader's interests.
You're right.. If I don't like it, I won't read it anymore. Which is fine by me (on my part) doesn't waste my time anymore, and I find more interesting things to do with my attention. But is it really okay for you? Yeah sure, losing only one reader is fine... But what about when you lose 5... Then 10... 15... And so on?
You. As a writer. Should WANT people to read. What's the point of writing anything if you don't want anyone to read it? Especially- what is the point in posting it on the internet?
If you want readers, and you want the readers to stay... Then give them a good reason to KEEP reading.
Lessons I all learned from a great writing mentor in his finest years, I am just forwarding his words to others. Take it or leave it, it's up to you. Just giving the suggestion.
| L0veB00ks chapter 41 . 11/27/2013
IM SO GLAD YOU KEPT WRITING!
I love this chapter and I can't wait for the next one, but I don't care how long it takes because I know how hard it is to post and how you have other things to do, so I'm not just gonna ask you to update, just that I love this chapter, want you to keep writing because your wonderful, and as long as you update before I die, I don't care how long it takes ;)
| Jakekul chapter 41 . 11/16/2013
Sooooo... She's all depressed about Jace all loves Jace, oh joy his Jace and then BAM you're like "whoa I am like going to switch the story randomly for no reason and have her hook up with her brother" what the fuck is up with your story dude. It is all over the fucking place. Make up your damn mind is this a Jace and OC story? Or not? Jesus tap dancing Christ
| L0veB00ks chapter 41 . 11/7/2013
LOVE IT SOOOO MUCH
| KlausXElena chapter 6 . 11/2/2013
To all of the people that are hating on this story grow up and I would love to see you write a 40 chapter story that you wouldn't even do
| Guest chapter 41 . 11/1/2013
Whaaaat? What happened to Jace?
Sorry, but I wanted Jace. Don't like this story anymore. Untouched kind if just dropped Jace off the face of the earth. Like what the hell?! How the hell do you do that? Just switch the mood of your story?
And when is it going to end. I feel this story has long overstayed it's welcome. Like it should've ended chapters ago. Don't make it like a movie that has so many sequels that it has now become boring and repetitive.
| Waylandlover18 chapter 2 . 11/1/2013
FEELINGS PEOPLE! JACE IS SEXY! MAKE HIM THAT WAY!