|Reviews for Research and Development: GLaDOS|
| ShinyShiny9 chapter 11 . 6/9/2014
Again, very impressive! It's hard to get into the head of a computer, especially one as crazy as GLaDOS, but you do it very convincingly. Like you said, it's not as lighthearted as the Wheatley fic, but it's still an engaging read. There are a fair number of discrepancies in the games, but you do a good job at smoothing them out and making them work. That whole elevator-breaker thing really doesn't make a lot of sense, now that you mentioned it . . . never thought of that before.
It's also intriguing to think that GLaDOS may have been perfectly fine morally at first, and that the morals were actually programmed out of her intentionally. Definitely not the brightest move on the humans' part . . . but also adds a very ironic angle to the whole situation. And it's pretty affecting to notice all those tiny little errors and missteps here and there that wound up creating the whole huge mess in the first place-a slight misjudgment on Derek's part, a few extra wires not unplugged from the AIMRoC . . . Kudos on a very well-written and thoughtful story!
| ShinyShiny9 chapter 4 . 6/8/2014
I was going to review at the end of this, but this will be an extra mid-story review. If even only for the "Dad, I need reviews!" bit, because that made my day. XD
That's really fascinating though, that GLaDOS originally didn't want to test at all - definitely the opposite of what you'd expect. But then, if she's still mostly Caroline and she absolutely hates testing, what were her thoughts during the Cave Johnson era? She was his assistant for years, while the most horrible parts of Aperture's history were going down. Did she develop her dislike for it then?
| BabyCharmander chapter 11 . 4/23/2014
I'm really glad I took the time to finish reading this-your interpretation of GLaDOS is excellent, and I love how you explain her different quirks, especially the way she acted in Portal and why, exactly, she wound up exploding. The explanation for Chell was very cool too, though I'm not so sure she was a teen on BYDTWD (she seemed maybe 10 or 11, going by her project). Still, that was a good way of working that out, especially given the screwy timeline. I love the ending too, with the Schrödinger's cat reference.
The only problem I saw here was the occasional grammatical errors I found, which should have been caught during editing. Having a deadline is good, but try not to sacrifice your editing too much to meet it.
Otherwise this was a great end to a great fic. I've already recommended it on my Tumblr, but I think I'll recommend it on TVTropes too, if you don't mind. Nice work!
| BabyCharmander chapter 10 . 4/22/2014
Another excellent chapter! I love how you explained everything, from the cores' wireless communication to the elevator in the breaker room to everything else. You tackled a lot of issues that other fics don't touch on, and that was awesome!
Her corrupted narration was a literal headache to read, but I'm glad it didn't last the entire chapter. Also, I... hadn't realized she DIDN'T have her Portal 1 head in the previous chapters. Oops...
Interesting explanation for why she explodes! I'd figured that the scientists had rigged the cores so that if they were attached to her for long enough (implying they were working) then they would damage her if they were forcibly destroyed, and GLaDOS did not realize this until it was too late, hence why she blows up at the end of the game. It's kind of a desperate measure, but Aperture's done crazier things.
Anyway, I need to run to work. I'll be reading the final chapter tomorrow, and I'm looking forward to it!
| Guest chapter 9 . 4/21/2014
BabyCharmander here! Had to log out just so I could post this.
Didn't think you'd hear from me again, eh? I've been meaning to come back to this story to finish reading it, since I enjoyed it too much to quit. I know it's been WELL over a year, but...
I apologize for taking so long with this! I did manage to push past the sentence fragments and read the entire chapter, though. I love how GLaDOS dealt with the different cores, and even created the Adventure Core! I was wondering why he was considered "corrupt," but what you wrote here makes sense!
I'll definitely be reading the last couple chapters over the next few days. Again, sorry for taking so long with this!
| pandaheadpancake chapter 11 . 7/27/2013
*applauds* Loved this! 1000 Internets! You win :D
| Rhiannon chapter 3 . 2/26/2013
This is really great! But one little problem... Jordan transformed into Justin?!
| Bondubras of Devoncroix chapter 7 . 1/31/2013
You have successfully created the rarest of character types: What I call a 'gray' person.
Gray people can't be described as good or evil, because of the simple fact that their evil is justified.
Sure GLADOS killed Derek, but she was justified by being forced to feel death billions upon billions of times.
If it was me, I wouldn't even warn them about killing the children. I'd simply imply that there will be consequences, and leave them to their own interpretations.
Loving the story.
| Bondubras of Devoncroix chapter 6 . 1/31/2013
Oh, s-t. The engineers screwed up. Big time.
I like how you created explanations for aspects of the Portal 2 'canon' timeline. It makes certain things so much easier to understand.
Loving the story.
| Vercinacox chapter 10 . 1/14/2013
Just wanted to say that I had thought about the corrupt core thing, and was glad to see that someone saw fit to put that into their writing. Made me very happy and not so .. alone feeling? Guess that's the word. I'm not sure why someone would assume a core was created to be corrupt, but..
| Vercinacox chapter 3 . 1/14/2013
When I first started this, I admitted I ALMOST closed it when you detailed how you were going in a different direction.. I'm SO glad I didn't, this is absolutely wonderful! Also, I LOVED the wheatley one! You're a great writer, and hopefully reading more will continue to push my need to write even more. It's been well over ten years now, so it could turn out to be a disaster, but hey.. worth a try. :D
| BabyCharmander chapter 9 . 12/30/2012
Hmm, starting to write my review before finishing the chapter... I need to say this. While this chapter is good and interesting and I like the way you introduced the cores and showed her ways of dealing with them, there is one major problem:
I am having the hardest time staying focused to read this chapter because there are SO MANY SENTENCE FRAGMENTS. I don't know if you did this on purpose or not, but either way, they are so choppy and jarring that I keep getting jerked out of the story. Don't get me wrong-sentence fragments have their place and can be effective at times, but having so many of them all over the place is incredibly jarring. I'm not going to quote every fragment I find, but here's one of them for an example: "She would force a data stream link-up through this hole. Scramble all the data she could. And fry whatever fragile processors she had access too." The sentences are just... choppy. Plus there's the grammar error at the end: You used "too" instead of "to."
Did you rush to get this chapter finished/posted? Because while occasionally in previous chapters I might spot one grammatical error or typo, here, I've been seeing them all over the place. So if you can, please take some time to edit the chapter to make it a little more readable.
Were you writing in fragments to show something about GLaDOS? If so, well... I know you've done something similar to this before, like with the all-caps, no-punctuation dialogue Wheatley had in the other fic to show how annoying his voice was, but that was short-lived. Here, the sentence fragments are all over the place and only serve to jar the reader out of the story. Using certain writing techniques to give the readers a certain impression of a character can work in moderation, but used too much, it just becomes distracting.
...I'm trying to go back to reading the chapter but the sentence fragments are getting on my nerves. I'm really sorry about the negative review; I've really enjoyed the story up to this point, but it's getting annoying trying to push through all these sentence fragments to actually untangle the story from the writing technique.
| BabyCharmander chapter 8 . 12/30/2012
And once again, you've done an excellent job of showing how GLaDOS's character has developed, from her more subtle emotions to her love of Science. The way she goes from being a euphoria-addict to conducting tests purely for scientific purposes works very well.
The neurotoxin thing was rather upsetting-even though we don't know these scientists as well, the whole scene is still rather shocking and sad, though not quite as much as Derek's death.
I'm guessing the one human that escaped was Rattmann... we know he survives through a lot of what GLaDOS does due to his paranoia, so I guess that's the case here. Wonder how the rest of this is going to play out...
| BabyCharmander chapter 7 . 12/29/2012
...Oh, wow. Yes, Derek's death did have an impact... I knew GLaDOS does cruel things, but her threatening his daughter still shocked me, and her killing him...
Agh, man, I hardly know what else to say to this chapter. It was excellent, and GLaDOS managed to be a sympathetic character while also being an absolutely terrifying one. Wow.
| BabyCharmander chapter 6 . 12/29/2012
Holy crap. D%; Poor GLaDOS! That is... a rather horrifying mistake. I got the suspicion that that might happen with the AIMRoC when Derek first introduced it, and I guess I was right...