|Reviews for The Lateness of the Hour|
| Silver wolf chapter 24 . 11/28/2013
Loved it Bella is a bitch!
Gosh woman give up already Harry is cuter!
Please please update soon as possible want to know what happens next!
| Pigwidgion chapter 24 . 8/29/2013
I am very happy Luna is coming into the picture! Harry needs more people in his corner! Bummed about Sirius being an ass but I can deal - maybe he will come around? Cant wait to see Bella bite it. This portrayal of her is so much more annoying than bellatrix ever was, at least she was way smarter and was a strong woman! Can't wait til next chapter!
| Azera-v chapter 20 . 6/1/2013
Love this story, wen do we get to see Sirius his 'just deserts.'
| Dareagon chapter 24 . 4/22/2013
Update soon please
| DestinyDragon chapter 24 . 4/5/2013
This story is awesome!
| zaika chapter 24 . 3/30/2013
WOW i like next chap please AAA
| Mashkai30 chapter 24 . 3/28/2013
Lovely story! I like it thus far and am looking forward to more. Thanks for sharing!
| bookworm51485 chapter 24 . 3/20/2013
I think that the idea behind the story is interesting, but you could really use a beta. Not so much to address issues with spelling/grammar as you don't do too badly with that (though you do spell 'magic' as 'magix' too often) but to address the many other issues this story has. The biggest one being issues with continuity, things contradicting each other, and some things just outright not making sense. Also the story reads as haphazard and all over the place, as if things are being written without a plan. Actually, a lot of the issues that are usually brought about by a lack of plan. On a positive note, I am seeing definite improvement. The story, at this point, is not nearly as all over the place as it was in the beginning, though there are still a number of things that make no sense. For instance, Harry didn't want them to know his real name because thinking it might give him away (though I think a geis on thought might be a bit much). But then he writes it down for them? There is still the risk of thought then. Moreso, even, because reading silently is thought. Also with his anger at the Cullens. Why is he still angry when it was established that their behavior was beyond their control (i.e. Bella's spells and potions)? It really doesn't make sense.
On that note, the Bella bashing is a little much. This isn't really written with the same intentions as the other part of the review, but I just wanted to say that I really think blatant bashing of her character is unnecessary. She's such a pig as depicted in canon, just writing her like that is bashing enough. The obsession with Edward, the inability to stand on her own, the way she used people to get what she wanted (Edward), the way she disregarded the feelings of others, etc. And of course, the way she turned into a massive Mary-Sue in the last Twilight book... No bashing necessary. She's an embarrassment to the human species.
Anyways, I do definitely see improvement in the writing, from beginning to end, there are just some things that still need work. I think getting a beta and working on a plan for the story (or any story) would help, with focus being placed on looking for inconsistencies and plot holes.
| candy4beth chapter 24 . 3/18/2013
its interesting but starting to get repetitive it would be nice if the flashbacks were more in order they just appear then fade away its confusing but the story has promise please update more soon
| Shiragiku-chaan chapter 24 . 3/9/2013
I love tour story.
| DragonFire Princess chapter 24 . 3/4/2013
Love the way this chapter has been writing, I hope the rest of the chapters will be just like this.
| MsQueenWitch chapter 24 . 2/22/2013
i like the story but you seemed to have a mix reaction and don't follow thru with what you write.. it has been only a week and harry has already forgiven edward you are leaving so many things in the air and not explaining anything. harry has already forgiven the vampires and not sticking to waht you say is going through his mind and head it makes the story bad.. sorry..u have a good plot but the writing ..ummm not as good as i was expecting.. i read the story all the way through and just was like bleh.. so i just wanted you to know my opinion.. not flaming just ...started off good but pales in comparison to what i think you are trying to convey..
| l'Arbre chapter 24 . 2/18/2013
i just finished reading this, it has taken me a few days to complete and while there was a rocky start i find that i am enjoying this story. i look forward to your next chapter
| moonprincess97524 chapter 15 . 2/16/2013
okay I have read two of your other stories and I enjoy them however this one is so very very confusing and also had many points that are not consistent like the fact that the Goblins were the ones that got Harry out of the magical world then in a few chapters things changed a bit. If you could can you go back over these chapters and take a look? Harry's reactions seem to be all over the place and that is getting a bit confusing, such as why would he ask Paul to love him when he knows that Paul is strait? Also when Harry met the medician man of the tribe the whole pack and Harry was told that he was part of the pack but not an imprint so whats with the forgetting? Also how is it that Bella got things into the Cullen house if she had never been over, or how did she get Edward to accept things from her to make Edward like her so quickly? She had to have known the way that Edward acted around Harry before she got with Edward.
| moonprincess97524 chapter 11 . 2/16/2013
Yahoo I was right it was some sort of spell that Bella did YAHOO I was right! I can just picture Edward crawling all over the outside of the house trying to get in. I do have to say that the Cullen family so far is doing a rather crappy job at being polite to those that helped Harry when they deserted him if they are trying to get back into Harry's life.