This story kept moving and kept my interest. I found too many descriptive words that most children wouldn't readily know or understand. There was no clear Beginning, Middle or End as a good story is supposed to have. There should have been some change made in the Main Character as a result of what he experienced. The ending was to weak and left me unsatisfied. If there were more attempts made to reach the goal (getting on the moon) I think this story could be developed into a memorable children's book. Keep at it

Huh...well Spike was not in this as much as I thought he would be and the other five did not appear at all...damn, I liked this but talk about having only one main...hmmm...

Oh shit...yeah, they are bucked...damn, well nothing not even peace last forever.

Evil alien bastards, but I just love how two goddesses don't even bother to appear until the last second, what the fuck?

Shit, talk about having nothing to hold you back from killing yourself, poor Twi.

Crazy bastards with their stupid plans to save all of life...hmmmmm...got a bad feeling about the next chapter, and what happened to everypony else?

Ummm...a few spelling amd grammer errors but nothing to major, I think you meant goddess though, since Celestia and Luna are goddesses but Discord is a god so...could he have been praying to Discord? Hmmm...I'm loving this.

Damn, she got seprated from Spike, never a good thing and Candence is a goddess, how can she lose against machines? This is getting crazy...I like it, hope Twi and Spike reunight soon.

Damn, everypony got smoked, talk about being bucked, shit...just ...got ...REAL! Oh, and one slight error but it's minor.

Huh, rather well made...I think I read this before though hmmmm...hoping it's a Spilight, will read more, good grammer and spelling, peace.