Reviews for Beyond an Heiress' Purpose
otakuficwriter chapter 34 . 10/4/2016
dude... flashbacks... like why? and it's the same one every time that's how u apparently pull a naruto
otakuficwriter chapter 20 . 10/2/2016
bruh... UP k nagaral?! wow talino mo te!
otakuficwriter chapter 20 . 10/2/2016
bruh... UP k nagaral?! wow talino mo te!
Anonym chapter 36 . 9/28/2016
Loved the story
xXChirushiXx chapter 36 . 8/13/2016
Thank you for writing such an amazing story!
SasuNarulover49 chapter 20 . 7/8/2016
I love the moon that embraces the sun it is so good and sad I cried from being to end
Wondermoonlight chapter 36 . 7/20/2015
Well, where to start? I'm on a mission in finding good Naruhina fics to entertain myself with and I came upon yours. I was absolutely not dissapointed. The idea is fantastic, it's new and really creative. Never thought I could like priestesses this much. You interpreted them in such a kind and humble way that they just worked good. And making Hinata one just made it better. The shamans were a great touch to the story. Their beauty and curses stole the show. Really, from all the OC's you created I liked Masayo the most. The love triangle was good, it was like just on point, if you would have done more it would have been overwhelming.
It was a good idea to start the story in tragedy and make it better from then on, I usually like it the other way around, but I could get really into it this time. I guess you just knew how to pull it off! Long story short: Well done! I would definitely read it again in the future.

Now for the things I didn't like:
I found your usage of verbal tenses extremely annoying. The change from present to past in the same phrase should not be done (narration or dialogue).
What was also awkward was your need to repeat things over and over again. For example Hinata being Sasukes only chance to revive his clan, I don't how many times I actually read that, but they were a lot of times.
And was it really necessary to copypaste your own text to use it as a flashback? Short texts would have been ok, but no, they were LONG paragraphs. I had no intentions of reading the same thing again so I just skipped it, it was boring.
What I didn't like from the story itself was the waste of time to make a prophecy when the only thing that was true from it was Hinata saving the world from darkness. Nothing else! Sasuke wasn't used to kill her (which was a total waste of great opportunities in my opinion) and Naruto being her only and real savior. I never felt he was, and worse, I don't remember him saving her even once! The ones I remember that actually saved her and meant something were Sasuke (oh, the irony) and Sakura (who came out of nowhere and took me a while to accept). If Naruto was supposed to be only an emotional savior than it would be different. He did some job at it, but I still felt that Hinata was incredibly week minded until the second timeskip.

Other than those points like I already said, I adored this story. 7/10! I had a great time! I'd like to thank you for posting this and give me the opportunity to read it and enjoy it! Don't worry, I really did. I wish you have a great time!
ZirconK chapter 36 . 6/10/2015
Shit i really am feeling so bad as i miss such a great fanfic and also of my best pair(Naruto-Hinata) reading for four months since i begin reading the fanfic. Well i still am a novice on this field.
I must admit this as one of best i ever read but it ended so soon(Hehe who am i kidding.i got to read full fic without having to wait!)
Lastly i must admit i was willing to go back all chapters to comment more but i restrain as it will be a little odd after so long. You rocked it!
Let's see if you have new naruhina ready or not as i still have to check your account for it!
Great chapter 36 . 5/25/2015
Hehehe, this is a cute story. Altough there were some small loop-holes left behind, like Why does the chakra of Kurama help the Sacred Priestess or what would have happened if Sasuke protected Hinata. Small things like that. Also, I suggest that the chapters in which Hinata is Tsuki, you name her Tsuki. Because we do know she's Hinata and she's suppose to stay in character. A recommendation. Oh well, Looking forward to more!
Shrimps1995 chapter 15 . 5/20/2015
haha, I suspected as I was reading the story, but from that line about the one ryo I know you are using some material from the Moon Embracing the Sun. I love that drama.
EdwinMoq chapter 36 . 5/2/2015
Wonderful history. Great job.
Ramrikai chapter 36 . 3/24/2015
Wow.

Wow.

Just ... Wow.

I'm actually very glad you didn't include a lemon here. You conveyed their deep, deep love very well without it, and the touches of suggestion you left were enough to portray their desire for one another. I feel that a lemon scene would have tarnished it with unneeded lust, like adding too much salt to a batch of cookie dough. You need a little bit to fully bring out the flavor, but too much spoils the batch. Similarly their love in this story needs a touch of lust or it would feel young and immature, but too much and the vibrant glow it dimmed and tinted. There are times for lemons, but that was not one of them. You did very well.

This whole story was fantastic. I bounced over here when I saw it recommended in New Chance. I didn't review until now because I simply couldn't stop reading.

After it's all said and done, I have but one complaint: the final pairing was spoiled. Part of it isn't really your fault as you should provide an accurate listing for readers' search purposes, but you also gave away the pairing in your author notes. I will admit that I would likely have either spoiled it for myself or not even read this story as SasuHina is an abomination in my eyes. However, for more patient and tolerant readers, the spoiling of the final pairing removes a significant amount of suspense of who she will end up with. In addition to this, the fact that any pairing with Hinata was spoiled at all means that her "death" shouldn't have fooled anyone.

Regardless, this was still an amazing story with one of the happiest endings I've seen in a long while. Granted I haven't read a completed fic in a while either, but still. Awesome.

P.S. The play on Hinata's name with "Tsuki" was very clever. I'm sure that anyone else who knew the meaning of her name enjoyed that as well.
August Smith chapter 18 . 11/18/2014
Skim so hard mofos wanna fine me! *dat shit cray...aint it dre?* SKIM SKIM SO HARD!...I can see a chapter or two of filler but...if the majority of the story isn't romance then please don't tag it as romance. I wanted to see some love here and all I've gotten thus far is angst...if the WHOLE story is Hinata getting her memory back so she can finally be with Naruto at the VERY end you should not tag the story as romance, its misleading and cruel :(
August Smith chapter 15 . 11/18/2014
Too much text regarding memory loss and random extra plot stuff...our main characters have barely interacted yet the story still revolves around them? I don't normally like to skim reading but I have a feeling I'm gonna be doing a lot of it :(
August Smith chapter 13 . 11/18/2014
I really like the story so far but...not nearly enough Naruto/Hinata/Sasuke development to justify their actions IMO. Its still a really good story, I just think that for the characters to feel so strongly about each other that there should have been more development between them. Like real dates and actual hangouts rather than just some weird obsessions and life-saving occurrences.
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