may you die while having sex bitch ...
(pls continue ;l

first of all ...
fuck you for abandoning this gold
you even removed rewrite :i

plssssssss... write in 3rd person's pov and not 1st

The indoctrination is extremely heavy in the first chapter. Hiruzen, that dirty and manipulative man, attempts to bring Naruto under his control for he only sees Naruto as a weapon.

I’ve never really liked little bitch cuck Naruto much

correct the grammer mistakes dammit
replaced that fucking i and my with he and his

"This is my partner Samui, and shes cool."

.. given how samui talks, thats outright a love confession.

HE DREAMS OF UZUSHIO?

Im kind of annoyed with kakashi in this. If he'd bothered reading naruto's file, hed KNOW that Naruto is a stealth and kenjutsu focused operative, despite being part of a heavy assault team. Yes, hes also got a focus in taijutsubut hes still overlooking an entire facet of naruto's current skillset.

Bijuu of wind... And he has a chakra mutation... So, he's still a jinchuriki then?

No need for a rewrite

Story is phenomenal. I very much hope that you keep it going

Honestly the Cloud announcement of random kenjutsu strikes is baffling

Has this yone hit his 0/10 or nah?

Indoctrination