The girl he beat at the beginning of the story, his sisters kendo sempai?

poor girl, really hope they get a larger party!

RewLy hope their guild grows

Damnnnnnn

Keep it up

Hehhehe

Lmfao awesome

Lol

Wish he used a bow too

I really hope this hasn't been abandoned as it's the best SAO story on the site. It hasn't even got to the romance or Yui yet.

ichiro seems rather nijima like lol

Why are you playing up the fact that he looks a bit androgynous, it's weird that everyone seems to focus on that and it's getting annoying.

Imagine being so lazy that you abandoned a story this good. I seriously, truly, 100% hate people like you. Don't start these things if you're too incompetent to finish them. Especially when you're asking people for money.

Why is it that the girls are always right in this story and Kirito is always wrong? With the synopsis for the story, I was expecting a more of a strong-willed Kirito who isn't everyone's doormat. I was clearly wrong. Supposedly he is also the official leader of the frontlines but with that sort of personality, how is he meant to lead anything? From what was told, Argo and Asuna need to step in when someone talks badly about him.

There was this moment when they were talking about how Kirito's kindness will be taken advantage of but the girls will apparently take care of it. Ironically they take advantage of it. In one of the starting chapters, where the girls are introduced, they come to his house and demand for his bath as well they take his bed, with him having to sleep on the couch, but he doesn't even get a thank you (Keep in mind, this is when they just met him). If I remember correctly, Moonlit Black Cats had all the males share the same room while Sachi had a separate one, these girls don't have that decency evidently.

There was also Argo who went behind his back to invite more people to the Guild and put the responsibility of their lives in his hands but of course, HE was the one who had to apologize to HER in that scenario (He is the guild leader by the way). Fucking hell.

The red flag was in the first chapter when he had to pay for the clothes of all his sister's friends, when does this ever happen, how much of a pushover do you need to be to let that happen. I wish I stopped reading then.

With your Kirito's yes-man personality, how is he supposed to have a Harem? He would be miserable in the relationship. I think the instances where he goes along with whatever the female characters want of him were meant to be humorous but it really isn't. There are way too many moments where this happens, it eventually added up enough for me to drop the story at chapter 14 (?).

Having gotten all that off my chest, the writing is good definitely one of the better-written fanfics on this site. The premise is also very good, it was the reason I stuck around that long. My biggest issue with this fanfic is how you handled the characters, honestly, that was poor. Overall a 4/10, but if you don't mind your MC being used as a doormat then you may like this story.

A Gary Stu Kirito… great…
Kirito CAN be beaten by people like Yuuki, Gabriel Miller, Bercouli Synthesis One, Kayaba(Without Kirito have ridiculously powerful plot armor, even with Kayaba turning off his AI assist.), and maybe even Asuna, and Kirito can’t hope to defeat these people without others helping him.