Reviews for Stargate Effect |
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![]() ![]() ![]() Your writingg is increasing in quality with each passing chapter! :D |
![]() ![]() ![]() I would say that i think that this is the best chapter so far. I think there's a typo in the first part. I'm guessing that you meant to have "... we're actually severely depleted" and not deleted. The only other thing i had noticed was "...future of the Salarian Union, even as species it was at risk." I'm not quit sure what you were trying to say here. Besides that, everything looked great and flowed well. I'm not saying that you other chapters were bad, because they weren't, I'm just saying that i thought this one is the best so far. I think that you writing has been getting better with each chapter. Also, don't worry to much about rushing a few parts, as that is not necessarily a bad thing. You get better at writing just like anything else; by doing it a lot. Personally, I think it's better to just push through a part you're stuck on than it is to get stuck on it. It's less frustrating, and lets you get back to writing. What I'm trying to say that as this is your first fic, it's OK to rush a tricky bit. Now that it's done, you can figure out what do do next and get back to writing, instead of pulling your hair out over it. You've done a great job so far, so don't let yourself be discouraged or bogged down and keep on going! As for the story itself, I like the chapter too. I feel that you've done a good job of handled the characters in a way that's believable. Yes, the Council is arrogant, but they are not stupid and willing to risk war over pride. The Tau'ri are launching all their ships so as to put up a good show. Everyone so far has acted in a plausible and justifiable fashion. Now, I'm also interested in seeing what the Salarians are up to. If they want tech and the Tau'ri are willing to deal, they'd have to find something that would be safe to give. I can't see them giving anything made from, contains, or uses Naquadah, so they would have to come up with something else to trade. Or perhaps the Salarians have something else in mind. Either way, this is an interesting development. Good chapter, and i await the next. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Tevos sounds alot like High Chancellor Travell from Stargate... to me that is |
![]() ![]() ![]() well looks like politic is a universal constant. anyway another great chapter, so when are the Tau'ri going to give the council a history lesson, and well anyway so good chapter but a bit short |
![]() ![]() ![]() Look forward to more and their reaction to the stargate |
![]() ![]() Ce chapitre est pas mal, personnellement je ne trouve pas que la fin soit bâcler mais donne envie de lire la suite rapidement. |
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![]() ![]() Good story so far! Keep up the good work! |
![]() ![]() going from what ecnerwal8675309 has said, imagin casting a singularity, powered by a ZPM, that thing would mince plannets! And I imagin that there are thousands of other litle applications we could come up with, for instance the FTL for mass effect has the ships mass dropped to zero befor accellerating (or something like that), the hyperdrive from SG pushes the ship into the 11th dimention where the ship can fly and using it normal thrusters in a dimention thats physics move faster,(not sure if my understanding of that is right) if you put them both together... A ship that can go to FTL in normal space, entering Hyperspace and going to FTL there... Well you might have them catching up to the Destiny, from SGU and bringing the ship back at those kinds of speeds... |
![]() ![]() ![]() This is actually for chapter 6, but won't let me post another review on that chapter, so it's going here. So far, i like how you are doing negotiations, as it make sense in story, with the council wanting to bring the humans into the fold, and with the humans wanting to remain on friendly and somewhat allied terms without being dragged to far into they system, without offending the council at the same time. It's a believable reaction to the situation, and introduces an interesting dynamic between the two sides, as both sides what to have their way with the other, but at the same time don't want to irreversibly piss them off. This leads to and awkward dance between the two, with both trying to lead the dance without stepping on any feet. Given that the council wants to visit earth, and since I'm pretty sure disclosure hasn't happened yet... On another note, I think that the mass effect and element zero would actually be quite useful to the Tau'ri. Yes, kinetic barriers wouldn't be that useful to them, but that is only one possible application. At its core, the mass effect is the ability to spontaneously change the mass of objects, which is an extremely open ended effect. As i see and understand it, the mass effect has three limiting factors. One, ingenuity. That is to say, the potential applications of the effect is only limited by your imagination and ability to come of with ways to use its power. The second and third factors are energy and cooling. Basically, the power of the mass effect is limited by your ability to power it, and your ability to keep everything running cool so your devices don't melt. Other than that, it pretty much scales indefinitely, so if you were to combine element zero with the superior power and cooling tech of Stargate, I have no doubt that you could do all sorts of awesome things. Also biotics. Anyways, everything seems to be going well, so keep it up! |
![]() ![]() ferduran said "Very good update, by the way when the Admiral have to play to be a tour guide, I wonder if you will show their reaction when they come inside his ship." Captiosus said "Good chapter, and i suggest for additional mindfuckery for the Council: send them back via Stargate. Lets see them wrap their heads around THAT one." How about taking the council back though a supergate. I think that would be even cooler. P.S. I love the story so far, It's on my list of things to check daily. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Give that tour with a smile on your face :D |
![]() ![]() ![]() Very good update, by the way when the Admiral have to play to be a tour guide, I wonder if you will show their reaction when they come inside his ship. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Good chapter, and i suggest for additional mindfuckery for the Council: send them back via Stargate. Lets see them wrap their heads around THAT one. |
![]() ![]() ![]() interesting |