|Reviews for Stargate Effect|
| Kaldi97 chapter 3 . 9/27/2012
| ferduran chapter 2 . 9/26/2012
The SG people is destined to never have a peaceful first contact, I wonder how they will intent to fix the problem. By the way will you use the clone of Jack? because he must be a young adult again and with the experience and skills that he got from the original that would made things very interesting. Also how are you planning made the disclosure. Bye
| MetalKing1417 chapter 2 . 9/26/2012
Okay so far, but hard to read due to not notifying the reader well when perspective changes.
| MasterFeign chapter 2 . 9/26/2012
Hmmm first contact certainly didn't go too well, but at least it adds to the drama (and story respectively).
One thing I'd suggest is having a line break between the stargate/mass effect cutscenes just to make it a bit more clear. That is until they converge I suppose.
You certainly know how to create a scene, as well as characterisation. Those were two strong points I noticed.
As I always tell those who I review, it's always good to reread your work outloud that way you'll catch things you normally wouldn't otherwise.
Otherwise a great start! The stargate humans certainly don't waste time when being quite outnumbered, haha.
| Drake chapter 2 . 9/26/2012
nice start hope for more soon.
really space hookers?
| Kaldi97 chapter 2 . 9/26/2012
| Eien Samsara chapter 2 . 9/26/2012
this looks good but i have a question will the humans find the citadel omnitools
| Jouaint chapter 1 . 9/26/2012
| Eien Samsara chapter 1 . 9/26/2012
| drich147 chapter 1 . 9/26/2012
You need a lot more line breaks.
As it is now, there is no spacing between the lines, which makes it incredibly annoying to read, something that most readers won't bother with.
Other than that, it's a good story.
| Guest chapter 1 . 9/26/2012
Okay this is pretty good, but you need to paragraph your sentences.
Also why would they attack the Turians; they have no idea how much damage a Turian ship could do, or how many ships they have, they also don't know why the Terminus ship was attacked. They don't know if the boarding craft have hostile intentions, they could be saving the people on the ship.
P.S 24 Ships vs 1 ship, nobody in their right mind would take those odds, especially without knowing how powerful they are. Even if they did have reinforcements close.
Not trying to be overly harsh, but you learn by criticism.
| Kaldi97 chapter 1 . 9/26/2012
Awesome and Awesome.
| Lay Down Hunter chapter 1 . 9/26/2012
Lol oh shit!
| Doop chapter 1 . 9/26/2012
No offence dude, but you are making humans too aggressive here. I'm just saying, The people of stargate do not just open fire on unknowns