|Reviews for The Other King|
| Anon chapter 30 . 6/7
Here are my answers
1.I am not sure,but Lance acts innocent
the best thing ever,I am very happy that they got together
5. ...they are ?
| Bulbreon chapter 1 . 4/6/2015
Oh Gawd that was simply a great first chapter. Hot damn that was so interesting I feel like i'm reading Shakespeare (Without most of the misunderstood words). I just can't help but think the Advanceshipping is weird. Like they're talking about how Ash loved Misty and now she's married to Gary, this confuses me greatly but i'll see about that in later chapters, i'll review again at a point where I think is needed.
| ChloboShoka chapter 1 . 2/6/2015
This is a response to Mr. WTF, the anon below me. While you may have valid points, the way you flamed me and your rudeness makes all your points invalid. The fact that you're anonymous and can't even bother to log into your own account is just further proof you are coward and an asshole hiding behind a screen.
"There are so many plot holes..so many contrived bullshit OOC moments."
Example? Where did you find these plot holes and what made you think the characters are OOC?
"Shit Grammer abound ladies and gents, followed up by the unwise use of time skips ( this story starts in 1593 and ends 1600)."
Check yourself before you wreck yourself. Why is my grammar shit and why are my time skips unwise. Some stories use time skips all the time so why can't I?
"Not to mention u bashed together an unholy number of fandoms into one story. How this story ever won anything is beyond my fucking mind and I wish this piece of shit isnt repeated in the rest of your works,but, just incase it is, go fuck yourself."
If you don't like it, don't read it. If you are like this to other authors to fics you don't like, then you too can also fuck yourself. If you thought my story was sucked ass, why did you continue to read it? There must have been something about it that you liked.
Xigbar is executed because he was a traitor. Also if you hate me as a person because you didn't like my fic, then you must be pathetic. Just further proof you, Anon, are a coward. Guess what? I will not stop writing and never will. Did you know that I have also written a prequel, sequel AND a spin-off to this fic.
I will continue to get better.
| WTF chapter 30 . 2/5/2015
Oh, i left this out, but, since you jumped all over the place, I was never emotionally invested in any of the characters, plus most of xemnas crew died with barely any details given (Xigbar get executed for what? maybe for just being Xigbar, but if that's the case then another reason as to why this story sucked ass).
Also, Chapter 24, made me want to scrape my eyes oiut of their sockets and spare them this ungodly sight. In chapter 24 you throw some shit together ( I.E. Gary's expelling Misty from his realm and their child is labelled a bastard, Apparently Gary has been nailing Dawn for a couple of years, and also apparenlty Iris is Gary's new wife,) and you expect me to eat this shit right after I'm done reading about how Kamon dies?...No go fuck yourself buddy.
You expect me to believe that Iris would just go into another marriage after 3 fucked marriages?Oh, and people seem to flip on each other real quick over some retarded bullshit. Please...i think i may hate you as a person. But that wouldn't be fair, but, please dont ever write again without getting a few beta-readers.
| WTF chapter 28 . 2/5/2015
There are so many plot holes..so many contrived bullshit OOC moments. Shit Grammer abound ladies and gents, followed up by the unwise use of time skips ( this story starts in 1593 and ends 1600). Not to mention u bashed together an unholy number of fandoms into one story. How this story ever won anything is beyond my fucking mind and I wish this piece of shit isnt repeated in the rest of your works,but, just incase it is, go fuck yourself.
| Plasma57 chapter 30 . 6/20/2014
I don't think Lance was truly guilty. I don't have comments on the other questions though. Excellent story, keep up the good work.
| Imperator Justinian chapter 30 . 3/18/2013
Congratulations of becoming best wishfulshipping fan fic of 2012! The finale was good, although rather sad. To answer your questions, I don't think Lance was guilty, although he might have been somewhat desperate I don't think he would go to such lengths. I don't have a definite idea as who was the killer. Yes, I do think that was the point of this story. The poem was good, who was the author? I'm indifferent towards Clair and Pagan.
| PlumpysWorld chapter 27 . 2/20/2013
Noooo! H-h-how could Delia do this to me? JK Since Giovanni was a real...
Anyways great chappie and I can't believe how obsessed Lance is with Iris. It's kind of scary tehe. Like stalkers!
| Foxwolf22 chapter 30 . 2/9/2013
1. No, all he really wanted was to marry Iris.
2. Hmmmmm, not quite sure. Part of me wants to say Giovanni, but I don't really know.
4. An awesome way to end the story, but I'm sorta confused with 'My courage found the art.' But then again, most poetry is confusing, so no complaints.
| Foxwolf22 chapter 27 . 2/9/2013
MIMEY! I was not expecting that. I'd write more, but I have to finish!
| Foxwolf22 chapter 26 . 2/9/2013
"I have the most awesome wife!"
Best. Line. Ever.
| HollowKU chapter 11 . 1/31/2013
Nice chapter. Kamon is going to be a problem in Cilan and Iris' relationship.
| HollowKU chapter 10 . 1/31/2013
Yep. Cilan is the most hated one. Well, it's all part of the plot. And poor May. Anyway, good job, Chloe D
| HollowKU chapter 9 . 1/31/2013
Haha. "Bitch please!" That line made me laugh. Anyway, the story is getting more interesting, and this is a good chapter.
| VivatRex chapter 1 . 1/24/2013
Hello! Known Unknowns here from the review game on the WA forum.
Although I haven't been involved in the Pokemon fandom for quite a few years, I really enjoy what you're doing here with the more serious take on the game with added inspiration from another fandom. The detail is just right that I have an excellent mental picture of what's happening. My only critique is that I noticed a few misspelled words, and my only advice for that is simply to have a keener eye when editing. So, overall, nicely done!