Reviews for Abducted
the Oracle of Akemi chapter 29 . 2/14
That was a GREAT story. Poor Aurora, (at first) happy Adrian. The cycle goes on...
Thrae Elddim chapter 29 . 6/4/2014
This had to be one of the cutest things ever while at the same time being heart-wrenching and mysterious and... Everything. Just amazing. Thanks for sharing!
Shiori Kudo chapter 26 . 5/29/2014
So, are Eugene and Edward brothers or cousins? Because you've been using both and it's kind of confusing.
Shiori Kudo chapter 15 . 5/29/2014
I liked the lantern scene.
Shiori Kudo chapter 1 . 5/28/2014
Your grammar is very good. The only things I noticed was that you used "sheds" instead of "shades", and that "I've to admit, your daughter isn't a proper princess!" needs "got" or you need to break up "I've" into "I have". Also, it was kind of difficult to tell what were thoughts and what was spoken. You should make that a little clearer.
Addira chapter 29 . 5/18/2014
BAAHAHAAHAHAA That fucking ending!
That is just perfect holy crap! Best line of the whole story right there.
Goddamn gimme a moment to collect myself.
Ok, ok, on with the review.
To be honest I'm surprised I read the whole thing. I'm not usually one for fluff and typically grammar mistakes and errors tick me off to the point of utter story abandonment. But I stuck it out (and I had to take many pauses to digest the fluff - but that's just me! Fluff is good, don't get me wrong.) and I'm glad I did.
That ending. All of the fucking awards to that ending.
If I had to say anything constructive to this whole thing would be to address the lack of debonair Flynn. He had his transition into Eugene fairly quickly. I was hoping, chapter per chapter as I read, that Eugene would slip back into Flynn's mindset but it never happened which kind of took me out of the story. He was Flynn for so long and then POOF! 3 chapters later he is a stricken puppy called Eugene who had no recollection of being Flynn Rider. (But if his transition was made in haste to please the "fluffers" then I suppose it's alright.)
Another thing that slightly took me out of the story was your use of "I've" or "We've"... sometimes it's just better if you write it out completely. I don't have a concrete example where you have done this (because I forgot where you wrote it down and I'd have to go back and hunt them down) but if you'd like I could find them and explain which grammar road you could have taken to avoid many of the easily avoidable grammar mistakes you have made. (It's alright, it happens to everyone.)
Love the cliffhangers.
"Maybe" is one word, there is no space. (I saw this a couple times too.)
Also last thing before I get too annoying (It tends to happen and I apologize), you don't need to ask at the end of your chapter for people to favourite and review. Just be your charming self and try to avoid grovelling and begging. For example:
"Reviews/Faves/Follows... Plz...Plz...Plz. I love them." - Acceptable.
"Review to get more." [Chapter 17] - You can easily tick off people with that.
It's understandable that the more reviews you obtain, the more motivation is put into the next chapter but 'fishing' for reviews isn't exactly a good thing either. If someone was just leisurely reading this story and saw that it could be a deal breaker.
So yeah, that was that.
The positives are so numerous and I'm only going to brush the surface but: the storyline was amazing, the characters were believable, debonair Flynn (when he was there) was perfection, how you tied in all the characters from the feature film was awesome, how you constantly put your two protagonists in peril and danger was awesome - keeps us on our toes, you can tell the characters were frustrated beyond all frustrations and that is just awesome as well, your time skips were appropriate and were always used as a plot device and never because they were convenient at that point in time, you never made it too awkward to read in a public place (this is a problem I've encountered many times in other stories), and last but not least you managed to get over 90,000 words down and stuck it out to the end, thus finishing your story.
*standing ovation of epic clapping* Bravo! Bravo!
**throws flowers everywhere**
Guest chapter 29 . 5/17/2014
Oh my goodness, this was so adorable! The ending was superb! I love how it brings it back full circle by saying abduct her in full cycle. Throughout the piece your writing has improved and it's been very enjoyable to read! So cute. THank you for your writings ! (:
Guest chapter 13 . 5/16/2014
dude you don't understand because i don't really leave review for ppl but your story is adorable and i love that they love each other! agh
daianapotter chapter 2 . 1/14/2014
jajaja very funny xD
daianapotter chapter 1 . 1/14/2014
i really like this story _
A Battle Inside My Heart chapter 29 . 1/3/2014
This is the best tangled fanfiction I have ever read! I seriously love the endin and of my gods it was just freaking amazing!
123hereigo456 chapter 29 . 12/23/2013
I absolutely loved it!
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Spottedmask12 chapter 29 . 11/15/2013
That is so funny!
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