|Reviews for Figmentum|
| Rebadams7 chapter 5 . 10/25/2012
Afraid to remember
Driven to forget
Penning a wistful fantasy
A metaphor for life
Written in the stars
Living life inside
Another kind of bars
| callmepagliacci chapter 5 . 10/25/2012
Aw, shit, Shelly! What are you doing to me, here?
I found myself wishing I had come up with this idea... well, many times since I read your premise. I doubt I could do it justice, however.
I'm loving your mermaid-water/narrator-writing analogy.
And now, my revieku for Chapter 5:
She writes, home, alone,
A bed too big, mind too full
Dreams- a green-eyed man.
| quoideneufj chapter 5 . 10/25/2012
Definitely still reading!
| TwistStix chapter 5 . 10/25/2012
Powerful chapter! The writing felt very fragmented and reflected Bella's current life perfectly. I presume that is what you were trying to convey. Not sure how the mermaid story will ultimately relate to Bella if at all. She does feel pressure from the mother to be more social and "normal" and in a way I guess she is scared to continue her Edward story. But will Bella eventually choose Edward over her current reality. You've really got me guessing with this story and I love it :)
| MissWinkles chapter 4 . 10/25/2012
You can feel the palpable wrongness between Edward and Rose. It's forced and weird. Plus she bring hand sanitizer on a date.
But then - - he's DocWard, And not just any old Doc A KIDS DOCTOR. *FLAIL*
| MissWinkles chapter 3 . 10/25/2012
Ugh. You know what the worst thing is? EVERYTHING Jasper says, I'm like "I know. I know." Been. There. But then I know you know ;)
You're making my feels all feely. I don't know if I can read more than one chapter at a time!
Love you like clean fluffy socks. xxx
| Fiyaaa chapter 1 . 10/25/2012
callmepagacalli rec'd this :)
I'm intrigued by the plot! x
| lepetitbatonrouge chapter 5 . 10/24/2012
Five chapters in and this has already become one the best stories I have read on fanfiction. Please update soon.
| debslmac chapter 5 . 10/24/2012
| Maplestyle chapter 5 . 10/24/2012
Your words are magic and I can't wait to read more!
| lisamichelle17 chapter 5 . 10/24/2012
I love your writing. I feel like Bella is creating the illusion of her perfect man for he. Edward is becoming that. I think her and Jasper were better as friends than lovers. Alice's visit with Bella felt odd for me. They didn't talk about nothing deeply personal. In the back of my mind I feel like maybe Jasper and Alice might be starting something but we don't know that yet. I don't like this Renee. She is meddling a lot. I can understand how mother's worry about their daughters totally too. Jake is your typical agent. He wants to see what Bella is coming up with. I actually like the idea of mermaids as a story. Edward is still on her mind and the fact that she is dreaming of him sexually is huge in my eyes. I'm really curious and excited at where you take us.
| Gaby-wotnow chapter 5 . 10/24/2012
This story just makes me feel all kinds of things. Edward is her need for more manifested thru her dreams and story. (my opinion of course). She amazingly shuts him up enough to write this other beautiful innocent story and yet she still dreams with him. *sigh*
I love her brilliant mind (yours obviously) the characters just using her to tell their stories.
"I'm just a conduit for a story that already exists, somewhere in the universe, and all I do is put it in words and make it accessible" just beautiful!
Bella may force Edward into silence but I'm sure he will insist on having his story come to fruition. He is there for a reason. Bella must explore it!
| shehazi chapter 5 . 10/24/2012
I adore the premise of this story... And your writing.. What avid reader/ writer hasn't wondered if they could merge their life into their fiction or have it seem to take over? feel it rising like the inexorable tide. Thanks for sharing.
| meleficent chapter 5 . 10/24/2012
I've really enjoyed the story so far. I'm interested in seeing where this is going to lead. As always, great writing :)
| Bedrooomeyes chapter 5 . 10/24/2012
Wow, just wow. I found this on the lemonade stand and am I ever glad that I did!