|Reviews for The Snake and The Canary|
| Darkfire374 chapter 9 . 3/5
Wait, it's called Share Stock? All this time I thought the announcer was saying, "Sure, why not?"
| The Guest chapter 10 . 9/27/2013
FINALLY A NEW CHAPTER!
| MW chapter 10 . 9/14/2013
This is one of my favorite stories on this site. Chapter 10 was definitely worth the wait. Keep writing! :)
| AmetuerAuthor chapter 9 . 11/18/2012
This some of the best brawl fanfiction I've read in a long while. Your storytelling abilities are remarkable, and I am finding myself captivated by the rollercoaster-esc plot. However, there are a few hinge I would like to point out.
For starters, I am discovering small typos throughout this, usually a comma instead of a period or something of that sort. I know that you proofread quite well. However, little things like that can trip up a reader's flow, so I recommend trying a different approach for final touch-ups before posting.
Another thing that has come to my attention is that in some cases, it will seem that there will be entire words missing from a sentence. For example, if the structure was "Pronoun verb adjective," or "Verb adjective, Pronoun," the verb will be non-existent. Just something to look for when revising.
But, aside from those nit-picks of mine, you did a terrific job. Absolutely fantastic. I look forward to seeing where this story goes!
| TheWordMasterofFiction chapter 9 . 11/14/2012
Yes, another update! This time you definitely showed off how to write an excellent fight scene: it was chaotic (like most Brawl fights tend to be) and action-packed, but you made it easy to read without having to dumb too much of the action down. It was one of the best fight scenes I've read in a while, and I especially liked the teamwork Snake and Samus showed here. You did a nice job of making their two different fighting styles work (even though they lost), and used their weaknesses to Marth and Ike's advantage. For some reason, the part about Ganondorf being last made me laugh (because that must mean he's even lower than Jigglypuff, something I'd never think would be possible).
By the way, thank you for the very nice mention in your author note: I'm always looking for fics that interest me, and so far I really enjoy this one. :) Keep up the good work!
| TheWordMasterofFiction chapter 8 . 11/11/2012
So I've been reading this for a while now (although I forgot to favorite it when I first read it, so I've missed all the updates. Whoops.), and I have to admit...this is really well done. The grammar is well-rounded and the punctuation is so far correct (which is impressive, since most fics tend to have a few errors scattered about). I also really like the characterization of Snake: most seem to cast him as a perverted creep, but you write him as a man with emotions! Your characterization of Samus is also impressive, as she is able to act tough while still having somewhat of a soft, emotional side. The idea behind your fic (in which the whole fighting system is basically one big tournament watched by many) is pretty creative, and puts a spin on the game's fighting concept.
Anyways, I look forward to reading more updates to this fic, and cannot wait to see where exactly you take the plot next. Keep on writing!
| Metsubou chapter 8 . 11/9/2012
Great stuff! I'm really enjoying this story :D I can't wait till the next update!
| Seikotuner chapter 6 . 10/29/2012
Totally enjoying your spin on Samus and snake. hope you keep writing!
| The Reader chapter 6 . 10/17/2012
Finally, another great SnakexSamus story that doesn't make Samus a whore or make both of them having hardcore sex. Please continued this if you have the time.
| Guest chapter 6 . 10/12/2012
Good...good. I'm liking it.
| kat chapter 3 . 10/8/2012
Hey, this SSBB story is pretty cool. I like your portrayl of Samus :D
| Guest chapter 5 . 10/6/2012
| sippurp123 chapter 5 . 10/5/2012
Great chapter! Eager to read more. :)
| sippurp123 chapter 4 . 10/3/2012
Well done! Can't wait to read more, please update soon. :)
| PrincessLilac chapter 4 . 10/2/2012
This has been really good so far! PLEASE CONTINUE!