Reviews for Becoming Woman
kae011 chapter 7 . 8/6/2013
kabayan! pls update soon!
Guest chapter 7 . 7/20/2013
This story is amazing and I hope you continue on with it. Also there were and are a lot of great writers that have never attended school. So don't give up.
imjce chapter 7 . 7/17/2013
Michiru was crying. She was fragile & in Haruka's arms...really?! You left it there like that?! Oh common! Do you hear that?! It's the sounding 70's porn music not being played. Sex in the office. What more can you ask for!

Rika & Haruka. She's cousins with Michiru so it's wrong, but then again, she's naked in the shower, so you get a get out of jail free card. It's in the rule book. It clearly states if a naked girl is in the shower with you, you can do it, no repercussions. It's like leaving the toilet seat down, punch buggy no punch back, tag no tag backs; it's the rule of the land.
imjce chapter 6 . 7/17/2013
I didn't know high schools were so open & accepting of same sex relationships. I only wished that was the case. Instead, they bully, taunt, tease & isolate you. It's unfortunate.

High school reunion is still a no good for me. It's only been 9 yrs since I graduated. Plus, there's Facebook & twitter for that now.

Goodbye kiss? That's foreplay. Do it. Just do it!

imjce chapter 5 . 7/17/2013
High school reunion.

Dating. Affair.

Feeding in public. Obvious.

Ex-girlfriend. Drifted apart.

Relationship commencement. Begins...3...2...1...!

PS: gung ho? Are you English? Cause that's the Queen's English, more specifically, UK. I'm chuffed to bits if you are English. We can now chin wag cause we use familiar terms. Lavatory? British way of saying bathroom. I'm not from the UK, my country is a Commonwealth. Give you a hint: maple syrup, beaver, universal healthcare, Wayne Gretzky.
imjce chapter 4 . 7/17/2013

I made a music video like Haruka. Same intimate movements, all suggestive & teasing. Except there was no music, people were naked, no dancing, and cameras, a lot of cameras. Holy crap! I might have starred in a porno...!

Michiru's bra flying off, exposing her chest?! Overload! But yes, quite embarrassing. Haruka didn't want other people seeing Michiru's goods, they're for her eyes only.

Riku talking bout going gay & turning gay? Yes. Some girls do, but they also go back to guys just as quickly. They're what we refer to as hasbians. Michiru on the other hand is gay. She just doesn't know it yet. Michiru needs Haruka to show her her gayness...with her tongue.
imjce chapter 3 . 7/17/2013
My eyes are drooping. I think I'm stroking. But, must...finish review!

I love a woman in a suit. It's sexy. Just the perfect mixture of feminine & masculinity mixed into one. I always imagine Michiru being super sexy in a form fitting suit with her hair down.

Aunt Miho. Don't you just love it when they straightforward ask you how much you make? It's the best. Sarcasm? Hell yeah. Just because you make tonnes of money does not equate to being a good person. A loving, caring person is always more preferred in my books than a jack-a-s-s that makes 100K a year.

I love Haruka's confidence. Yeah. I make this much, this much, so? Not too many people have the balls to do that, I admire her confidence. But something tells me she's super, uber rich. Bill Gates rich.

High school reunion? I'll pass too. Just a bunch of arseholes comparing jobs, how much they make, and whose life is better. Haruka is right. My high school? You're pretty successful if you don't end up a drug dealer. What? Am I joking...? Yes...I'm joking...not!
imjce chapter 2 . 7/16/2013
Oh yeah!

That's exactly what I do too. Whenever I want to ask somebody on a date, I stalk them & get their schedule. I always prefer to pretend to be jogging in the park too, cause you know, it's less creepy.

What in the world is going on? Michiru's parents knows her rouse but is still insisting that Haruka date her? Huh?! That's like leaving a plate of cookies in front of the cookie monster, or a line of cocaine for Lindsay Lohan, or a denfenseless woman for Chris Brown; oh the temption.
imjce chapter 1 . 7/16/2013

If I had a hotel as big as Kaioh Crest, it's going to be my goal to take a piss in every toilet the hotel has. I was going to say have sex on each of the beds, but the hotel probably has at least 400-500 rooms, that's way too much; I can't take that many, are you kidding me?

Just because Michiru's cousin has a lot of boyfriends and likes sex, it makes her a prostitute? Hell no! If I eat cereal every morning, am I a cereal killer? If I like to cuss & swear, am I a dock worker? It doesn't work like that. Very uptight of Michiru.

Why would you pretend to be gay to get out of a blind date? It's like me cutting my leg off so I can retake my finals. Or, me purposely getting herpes to get out off donating blood. Or, me gouging my eyes out so I don't have to watch Scary Movie 5. It doesn't make sense. Unless Michiru is really gay, so why have Haruka pretend to be her girlfriend then?

Michiru's dad is pretty accepting. Michiru tells him she's gay & his reaction to Haruka is welcome on board? Would have been funnier if he said: "welcome abroad my daughter." cause...cause it's a sex joke you see...sigh...

rocketonthemoon chapter 7 . 7/10/2013
Hopefully the mood comes back to you. This is interesting and I certainly would like to read more of it. Michiru being super dense about her feeling's is always fun to read. Not to mention this thing with the cousin! Haruka's got a handful of women to deal with, huh?
shad chapter 7 . 7/1/2013
two reviews to one chapter insane right but yeah i hit the wrong button and sent it before i had finished typing. ok enough of my rambling ...anyway i like the conflicting play of emotions between the two characters both on individual and combined basis. with Michiru you get to see her conflict over her reaction to the sudden loss (and reemergence) of Haruka's presence and how it effects her without her even knowing (although it is very noticeable to those around her). on top of that add on her flailing emotions going into her rollercoaster experience with the all important ball and you get an even more complex look into her as a character. its great for relating feeling with the audience as generally there is something in a persons life they can relate to that situation (having high expectations for something and it not going as planned). then you bring it all together by having Haruka be there for her both as a physical and emotional support; once again solidifying there bond that although it has labeled "just friends" it is still yet to be completely defined at this point (which I just think keeps the story interesting). and then you have Haruka with her playful attitude upon seeing Michiru again; keeping things between them light and as drama free as possible. and then again she falls right into the roll of best friend going above and beyond being the support Michiru needs (again both physically and emotionally). and then you clos things out by leaving both characters in a semi state of turmoil. again i see this as a good way to keep readers interested. or possibly i read too much into things but its my opinion and i'm sticking to it. anyway i'm still really enjoying your story and look forward to however much more you plan on writing. (i would have liked to share my thoughts with you on dilemma about writing but i'm not sure it would be appropriate to put such things in a review and since I've never really saw fit to become a registered member here i can't send you a pm. you're a good author and you deserve to know it. despite all the factors that seem to be against you, that's all they are. you can surpass them. the only thing that can stop you is you. i know that's cliché but its true. you can make things happen so the roadblocks can only slow you down. like i said a moment ago, you're a good author. don't doubt yourself and don't let anyone tell you different and you'll be fine. and i'll be happy to reassure you whenever you need it :) haha i'm lame but whatever.) laters GeN.
shad chapter 7 . 7/1/2013
i'm glad to see you found inspiration to continue this story. like before i still find it very much intriguing and pleasing to read. your passion for writing shows in your work and i appreciate the effort you give in making the scenes meaningful and bringing them to life.
trueblue202 chapter 7 . 6/30/2013
Thanks for the wonderful update and sticking to the story. I can't wait for more haruka and michiru interaction.

The idea of publishing an original story is great! Do not let fear hold you back. Life is too short to be ruled by fear. Maybe your first book might not be an epic, or win any awards, but realistically, how many people's first book is great? Personally i think the key is to write more and publish more books so that your writing gets honed further and further with practice and time. Editors from publishers might even approach you as they see more and more potential from you. Everyone has to start somewhere, the journey of a thousand miles starts with a single step. So gather your courage and do it, and start living life to the fullest with no regrets :)
Alexia chapter 7 . 6/30/2013
I love your story, please do continue and i think you are doing an amazing writing here. Your story can intrigue many feelings: up, down, low, high. The haruka - rika scene is a turn on, i love it how haruka will keep her player personality, i hope she will ;) she is so talented in this story, michiru should need to really fingure herself out. Update soon will you :)?
Madeline1246 chapter 1 . 6/29/2013
very good
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