|Reviews for Becoming Woman|
| shad chapter 3 . 11/2/2012
i really enjoy the interactions between the characters. i like how you mesh together the different personalities into workable relationships. and yet at the same time you keep an air of mystery about the people. i really like the progression and look forward to more. laters.
[p.s. about my first review- it is a combination of the plot, your portrayal of the characters, and your style of writing. like i said before it's not entirely the idea you've come up with but the way that you've weaved your story together. the fact that i can never just read the chapters once is proof enough that your story is both interesting and entertaining. you've put some serious thought and time into this work and i appreciate that. so whether it's a high level of skill or just a natural talent, i still think you are a good writer. laters.]
| dcouran chapter 3 . 10/29/2012
Your stories are awesome! I want more chapters, please? Haha. Astig! Pinoy ka pala. Keep it up! Marami atang pinoy dito eh. Haha. :D
| Samaka chapter 3 . 10/29/2012
You're welcome. I'm just trying to be honest without being a fawner. I just say (type haha) what I think is obvious and you deserve to hear (read). I'm flattered to hear you read my review while writing a new chapter. I think that's the purpose of the reviewer, to inspire and push writers we know have potential, creativity and talent to continue with their stories. Since I know I lack one or more of these qualities (:S I'm not creative at all, hahaha) and would never be able to write a story of my own, I contribute by leaving a review. I like to support people who dedicate a little or as much time out of their personal life without seeking any benefit, but write for pleasure, fun or just because haha
And your writing style is not awkward, it's like I said easy to read. On the other hand, the story-line like you say it's a bit of a cliche, but what differentiates a story is what the author adds to it. It doesn't matter to me how many times I read the 'high class' Michiru VS the 'poor' Haruka OR the 'manly' Haruka vs the extremely 'femenine' (to the point of being straight, when she's obviously gay) Michiru BECAUSE every time I click on a 'new' story I'm faced with a different perspective or point of view from the writer. They change stuff and add personal interests and/or experiences and makes them seem like they're something new I've never read when I had, but under different circumstances. I don't know if you understand what I mean or if I totally went off the topic, but the point is that I'm reading your story because I like what you write and I can picture your words thus I enjoy what the characters go through :)
Now, this chapter gave some insights as to what's going in Michiru's and Haruka's minds. The first one, I think has developed a likeness toward the blonde that can become something else than friendship, something stronger, but it's early to tell. Now Miss. Tenoh on the other hand is very perverted hahaha
["I want to come with you."
"Excuse me?" I could have sworn she said she wanted to come with me.
Did I hear that right? Like go inside, get naked, and do the tango, come?
"I want to go with you to your High School Reunion."
Oh- she actually meant that.]
Hehe not yet cutie, you have to try harder Haruka ;)
I truly enjoyed the chapter. I got to read how Haruka acted in front of Michiru's family a second time and the cousin is quite the character. I think she could possibly become friend's with Haruka and help the girls in the future ;)
I feel like I have extended my review a lot :S but it was necessary, without anything else to say I'll 'see' you in chapter 4!
| Keeper Aki chapter 3 . 10/29/2012
The last part made me curious. Who just called Ruka? Is that her mom? I'm guessing Ruka's really rich and only models at the moment 'cause she's living by herself and not wanting to use her parent's money... Hoho, don't mind me it's just a guess, lol XD
| AleWindT chapter 3 . 10/28/2012
EWWW. Miho aunt is a toothache. For a moment I thought what she said would affect Haru. I like Haruka. she is relaxed and carefree.
Michi, she unconsciously liked the blonde, but she is in the stage of denial.
Rika, I liked its appearance. she likes Haruka. hehehehe problems there?
I'm dying to know who called Haruka. she has a girlfriend? OH NO. if so, then ... What happens here?
who's that blonde that anger?! In truth? she goes? XD
I'm so confused. Update soon!
Ja ne! XDDDDDD
| Viento-cortante chapter 3 . 10/28/2012
wonderful episode! I loved it from start to finish.
Apparently Michiru is attracted, but does not know. She is sure that she does not like women. She wants a family. She wants a boyfriend.
She wants a baby.
She apparently does not think any chance that she likes the blonde.
I wonder if the appearance of Rika be the reason to wake up in her feelings for the blonde. Although I wonder who will be Aya?
The million dollar question!
Who called Haruka? ... I have several assumptions.
It can be a girlfriend, sister or daughter.
Please update soon! You have left this chapter in the best part.
| Jay chapter 3 . 10/28/2012
What a wonderful and humorous chapter :) I enjoyed every word of it :) keep up the awesome job and look forward to your next update
| Alexia chapter 3 . 10/28/2012
Hey I enjoyed this chapter a lot. Haruka have a girlfriend? Hehehe was a little bit pervert her confusing really like it. With who talked Haruka at the end of chapter...I will love some kiss between both of them ;)
By the way...no, I'm not japanese, but if you want ask me something else here my email: theshadowg(underscore)2005atyah
| petiyaka chapter 3 . 10/28/2012
It was great! You really made my day.
(the only ones who don't believe Michiru is with Haruka are : the ones who know Michiru and the one who know Haruka. Does it mean that Haruka was a playgirl?)
| pewpewmew chapter 3 . 10/28/2012
Of course, I will continue to read and follow this one, it's an awesomesauce story ya'know and I luff it! :] oyeah, I think I read that from some *cough*ecchi*cough* manga before xD
Back to my review..
Wow, Miho is too harsh and bluntly inconsiderate tsk tsk good thing Haruka was able to calmly handle herself throughout the dinner, if I was in her position I already walked out of that resto (I don't have enough patience for that kind of people ._.) Rika on the other hand is her complete opposite. I like her lively character. I think she will be a lot of fun to have around Haruka & Michiru, a 'third party' maybe? xD would love to see her more on the future chappies :) Back to the parents..there's really something fishy going on between Haru and them hmmm I can sense it haha
I have a feeling that Michiru is starting to get interested and slowly falling in love with Haruka based on her actions throughout the chapter although she's still in denial. Getting comfortable around Haru and slowly opening herself is a baby step, right? or is it just me thinking that way?heheh oh and the reunion & the mystery caller I think I know where the story is going, but I'll keep it to myself first and we'll see if I'll hit the 'jackpot' or not xD
Awesome chapter, as usual ('nuff said) the plot, drama, grammar, theme..everything is flawlessly written. I definitely enjoyed reading it. Good job! *two thumbs up* oh and please update fast, the story is getting pretty interesting! :D (sorry for my lengthy review/comment)
| papapapuffy chapter 3 . 10/28/2012
Good chapter. I can't wait till Michiru realizes that Haruka's the perfect woman for her :) Update soon!
| James Birdsong chapter 3 . 10/28/2012
Awesome three chapters
| Hunter007 chapter 3 . 10/28/2012
Great chapter you got there! Somehow I have the feeling hat Haruka is not what she seems to be. I'm curios about what will happen next. Keep up the good work will ya.
| Electra Red chapter 3 . 10/28/2012
Ooh boy haruka tenoh falling prey to michirus charms:3 or perhaps the other way round!? Haha such a great chapter! A kiss on the cheek ooooh we are making progress. Yeeeesss. Anyways soon and thanks for updating! We will you round! :D
| ladyYamato09 chapter 1 . 10/28/2012
omg! didn't expect that coming! make Haruka SINGLE! ok maybe i'm over reacting...haha anyway update soon! i want to know what will rika do to get haruka's attention.,rivalry with cousins XD UPDATE! PLSSSSSSSSSS