|Reviews for The Hook and the Trout|
| cliffsofmoher11 chapter 1 . 10/18/2012
Hmm. This was ok, but your many spelling and word choice errors kept pulling me out of the story. If English is not your first language, then this is a good and actually impressive job. If English IS your first language, you have no excuse. Holmes, for instance, doesn't say "A world for all." That doesn't even make any sense! He says "A world war." Also, you need to use more appropriate words to fit this very dramatic situation. A man hanging on a hook is not thinking "blearily.". That's a word for when he's had a few too many beers. How does "agony" suddenly become just a "dull ache"? Re-think and rewrite with better word choices (think hard about the drama of it) and this piece will be much better. (Also, "The Trout" is the name of the song and should be in quotes and caps. And, yes, Schubert with a "c.")
| charliebrown1234 chapter 1 . 10/15/2012
Aaaahh! I got chills! Is this going to be continued? Please tell me it is...
| StarksViolet chapter 1 . 10/7/2012
I really loved the language you used in this piece, very in character and you've fit the inner monologue in very well!
The only think I wanted to ask was; didn't he say 'world war'? in the scene where you've written:
" Holmes breathed out with a shake of his head, "A world for all." "
I know it's pedantic, but I believe truly fantastic writing deserves honest truth in its reviews and comments, so here it is haha! There was nothing else to pick but that little line there :)
| Guest chapter 1 . 10/1/2012
Schubert with "sch" instead of "sh" google it ;-)
| WritingWolf14 chapter 1 . 9/30/2012
OMG! This is an amazing short story! I think you should make more!