|Reviews for Night at the Junkyard|
| mainegirlwrites chapter 1 . 6/14/2013
I just adore this story - its a great idea to tell the story from a different perspective! Best to you, Randee
| supernaturalbuffy chapter 1 . 10/23/2012
Nice show of suspense and emotion. I like how you identified each character without really giving names until they were spoken. I don't think that boy will ever be coming back to Bobby's again after that night.
| 1983Sarah chapter 1 . 10/3/2012
Great job! Poor guy, your mom's right, wish he could have at least got the exhaust pipe, although I suppose if Bobby had found him he would have been in deep doodoo, so maybe it's better he didn't get the pipe and he thought it all was a dream. :)
| TheYmp chapter 1 . 10/1/2012
Ha! A great XXL drabble that proves that crime doesn't pay!
I enjoyed the fleeting reference to Bobby's dog, Rumsfeld, and I thought the way you described them by the legs was very clever and effective.
Bad pun, Sam - "You really have a way of making women lose their head" - groan! Don't encourage him!
And "Whaddaya think this is – a friggin motel?" - classic Bobby
| Dizzo chapter 1 . 10/1/2012
Heehee, I love this. All the death and mutilation that the boys get involved in seems perfectly reasonable to us because we know what it's all about, but to an outsider, they would probably look like a bunch of psychos!
I almost (not quite because he was stealing from my beloved Bobby) but almost felt sorry for the poor guy!
And ... 'He could make out three pair of legs, one slightly bowed, one seemingly endless and one caressed by an axe' I love Bobby and his axe :)
Nice work, Kate :)
| ccase13 chapter 1 . 10/1/2012
I'm kinda with your mama, anybody poor enough to risk breaking into Bobby Singer's for parts, probably needs them real bad.
| Amberdreams chapter 1 . 10/1/2012
Ha ha your Mum was right, you should have let him have his scavenged goods as compensation - but in real life if this happened I bet the kid would be only too glad to get out of there alive! Great outsider POV!
| Swellison chapter 1 . 9/30/2012
Oh, this is awesome! Really great job with the outsider's point of view. I think my favorite line is Bobby's: "Whaddaya think this is – a friggin motel? When someone takes the first shower, it's me while you two shove a pizza in the stove. And now get busy, idjits!" LOL!
Think I'm siding with your mom about letting poor Jack have his exhaust pipe, though. And he lost his tools, too. D'you think he was scared straight?
I like your word count, too, 1111. Although I think you've got two words smashed together into one some place in this...ah, allover. Course, you can get around that by hyphenating it and preserving your perfect 1111, so... never mind.
Really great story, I just re-read and it stands up to the second reading just fine. I'm curious, how long did it take to write this?
| Twinchy chapter 1 . 9/30/2012
Most awesome story... erhm, drabble!
I simply LOVE how you describe Bobby and the boys bickering good-naturedly while unbeknownst under surveillance doing their job burning the vampires' corpses.
No wonder the young man wanted nothing more than to run and never look back. I think it was pretty kind of you making him bump his head and then believe he merely hallucinated what he saw at night - although you robbed him of the exhaust pipe and his tools to boot.
"But it was kinda creepy, sneaking through the maze of broken cars, some crashed und crumpled, lying in eerie silence while their misshapen shapes spoke of screeching metal and shattering glass and tires squealing in helpless protest over the blacktop." Gorgeous phrasing!
| missingmikey chapter 1 . 9/30/2012
Liked your story but got to agree with mom - that poor guy earned his exhaust pipe!
| SupernaturallyEgocentric chapter 1 . 9/30/2012
Very good story. Love an outsider POV.