|Reviews for Night of the Vampire|
| Poppy the Rabbit chapter 1 . 10/4/2012
Wait a minute, wait a minute...
Rouge gets bitten by a BAT?! So some strange girl or guy bat comes up and BITES her?! If it's just some random 'normal bat', how does THAT make since?!
I'm not meaning for this to be a flame at ALL! I just feel the need to piont that out...*sheepish grin* sorry...
| finallyexploded chapter 1 . 10/2/2012
The story is a fence the entire way. You're making a gamble when you don't need to. Add some descriptive paragraphs, cut out some unnecessary dialog and you should be doing fine.