Reviews for The Ultimate Generic Beach Chapter
WTHISTHIS chapter 1 . 8/29/2017
What the heck is this
Guest chapter 3 . 4/24/2016
HORRIBLE
jeannot1978 chapter 3 . 12/26/2014
You do remember that Yuuzuki Kiryuu has no pubic hair because of a genetic predisposition, right? Mikazuki Kiryuu also has that genetic disposition.
SilverSnake chapter 3 . 11/17/2014
Horrible, random events and I had no idea what was happening. Worst story on this website.
nom master chapter 3 . 8/13/2014
so many fucks
GXY-2013 chapter 3 . 7/17/2014
This. Story. Makes. No. Sense. WHATSOEVER!
Fireminer chapter 3 . 7/12/2013
No idea what the hell is happening!
H.C.E fangirl chapter 3 . 6/22/2013
Ako calls Keita 'Kei-chan' while Riko calls him' Keita'. They never called him Keita-kun.
The Obsidian chapter 1 . 2/16/2013
I am the real Obsidian. My job is to review each story critically, and efficiently.

My review has begun:

This was a heart-wrenching display of complete and utter failure.

The characters did not hold true to their designated personalities and there was no development whatsoever. Even if this Anime and Manga is relatively perverted and for the most part amusing. This fan-fiction was not.

there were no sensory details and the style of writing was morbid and elementary.

My review has ended.
Rubiopaloosa chapter 1 . 10/3/2012
You need to show more of the sex(y) scenes, not just put what happend. How he put the sunscreen on her, how she sucked his dick, and so on. This the fundamental part of erotica - the how.