What the heck is this

HORRIBLE

You do remember that Yuuzuki Kiryuu has no pubic hair because of a genetic predisposition, right? Mikazuki Kiryuu also has that genetic disposition.

Horrible, random events and I had no idea what was happening. Worst story on this website.

so many fucks

This. Story. Makes. No. Sense. WHATSOEVER!

No idea what the hell is happening!

Ako calls Keita 'Kei-chan' while Riko calls him' Keita'. They never called him Keita-kun.

I am the real Obsidian. My job is to review each story critically, and efficiently.

My review has begun:

This was a heart-wrenching display of complete and utter failure.

The characters did not hold true to their designated personalities and there was no development whatsoever. Even if this Anime and Manga is relatively perverted and for the most part amusing. This fan-fiction was not.

there were no sensory details and the style of writing was morbid and elementary.

My review has ended.

You need to show more of the sex(y) scenes, not just put what happend. How he put the sunscreen on her, how she sucked his dick, and so on. This the fundamental part of erotica - the how.