HydeLuver chapter 8 . 11/13/2012
Poor square Lucy doesn't stand a chance lol. I like the way Hyde is written in this story, he's still very hydelike but he's also the Hyde I imagine him to be around Jackie when they're alone. Like him saying up have to be dating someone to break up with them is something he'd definitely say but then taking care of her and giving him a compliment (as subtle as it was) is very sweet. I liked this chapter a lot.
HydeLuver chapter 7 . 11/12/2012
The episode where Donna came running back to Eric after the Casey thing made me rage so hard. I like the way you wrote this though, and incorporated Star Wars into it also, very Eric-like. Also, I really like that you take things that actually happened in the show, like the scene between Kelso and Jackie in the basement and Hyde frogging him, very cool. I'm glad Donna decided to be a better friend to Jackie and didn't make such a fuss about her dating Hyde like she did on the show.
HydeLuver chapter 6 . 11/12/2012
I like tense Hyde as he hears Jackie talking about Kelso. It was always fun to watch them kind of go at it on the show and Hyde frogging Kelso when he hit on Jackie. Eric's reaction to going to see Donna was pretty great, very realistic because he would be completely freaking out and unsure of what to do.
HydeLuver chapter 4 . 11/12/2012
I forgot how much I liked this chapter, and re-reading it now made it even more amazing. I like that Lucy caught on to the season 8 Donna that wasn't the great a friend to Jackie and its interesting hearing Eric decent her even though she makes very logical and truthful points. The smut scene was definitely very well written but it also had some sweet, romantic moments.
HydeLuver chapter 3 . 11/12/2012
Way to go Forman! Finally. I like the way you wrote Lucy, seems like a good match for Eric. I really liked the scene between Hyde and Jackie in his room, it was sweet and tense at the same time. Your pacing is good too, like it doesn't seem too rushed.
HydeLuver chapter 2 . 11/11/2012
I'm re-reading this chapter and it made me smile again. I love fez singing in the women's bathroom and then the innuendos between Jackie and Hyde. The bit when Eric finally comes out and is talking about his sexy is hilarious and it's such an Eric thing for him to be awkward while saying it. Also, when Jackie tells Hyde that she knows what he's thinking without having to look in his eyes is adorable, made me smile.
HydeLuver chapter 1 . 11/11/2012
I've been meaning to review this story for a while now. I really like the idea of them trying to find someone for Eric instead of just telling him to go to California. I always wished he would do so instead of running after Donna after the Casey fiasco. They should have done that in the show too, maybe show his relationship with the slurpee girl just so we could see Eric with someone other than Donna for once.

Your JH scenes are great and I love how you describe everything that's going on, I can pretty much visualize everything that's happening.
nannygirl chapter 12 . 11/5/2012
Another fabulous, fabulous chapter!

The first scene was very well don’t and you really had me feeling bad for Kelso maybe even more than the show did when he found out there. It’s kinda weird seeing the goofball so serious and sad, but you still did a great job at keeping him in character. The poor guy thinking everyone was laughing and him and when he realized if Jackie was in love with Hyde he’d never get her back. My heart really broke for him. Also really really loved Eric’s thoughts on the whole thing and this part was written so awesomely, “Also, his bearded friend was risking a life long friendship with Kelso over this - and loyalty was essential to Hyde. There's no way he'd risk everything if she wasn't important to him in some way. As nauseating as the concept was, he was almost certain that Hyde had real feelings for the devil.” LOVED! It’s just SO true and I liked the little devil bit he had to throw in at the end lol And nice way to close up the scene with the chocolate pudding.

Jackie and Hyde’s scene on swing set was really sweet. I could really imagine the two sitting there, all cuddled up and it makes such a lovely image! I thought you did a good job at writing their talk about Kelso and Jackie’s sweet talk and how it annoyed Hyde has me laughing. Oo and I really loved, because ei thought it was just such a creative idea and comparison, was Hyde comparing his life before and now with Jackie to The Wizard of Oz. That was brilliant! And the added end with it being a great acid trip lol very Hyde. Poor thing though, he was really still worried about Jackie changing her mind and going back to Kelso. I was so glad that Jackie’s words were able to make him feel better and less worried. Sweet ending to the scene with both of them getting up to face the music.

And then there was the big scene. Wonderful job on that confrontation scene with Hyde and Kelso. You did a good job at having Kelso be a mix of anger but still keeping him as bit of a goofball. And poor Hyde he really was feeling bad about making Kelso hate him so much, I liked how he tried to get him to forgive him even giving him that free punch. Oh but before that the part with the two wanting Jackie to get out and her refusing made me laugh, especially when she left and declared that she hated them both. Another part that made me laugh was when she and Donna and Eric came in trying to stop the punching and saying how he could get hurt, the he being Kelso lol

Really enjoyed the scene with Kelso and Jackie. I liked that you gave them a bigger and perhaps even sweeter moment after this whole thing. I really liked the speech that Jackie gave him and I’m glad Kelso agreed to give it a shot. And his ‘I still love you’ was heartbreaking. Nice touch with ending that scene with a Jackie and Hyde moment, a very sweet one at that! Loved Hyde admitting that he would create this storm with her all over again but be sure to pack more umbrellas next time lol.

And finally the last scene of the chapter was nicely done with the rain check and the song Jackie this time chose to play. :D

This was a really wonderful chapter! I really liked it! Will be back to read the epilogue soon! Till then keep up the terrific work!
nannygirl chapter 11 . 11/1/2012
This was a very terrific chapter!

A chapter that was very steamy and almost felt like I was intruder reading the scenes. Especially that first scene with Jackie and Hyde entering his room—and nothing that usually causes things to be M rated had actually happened!

I really enjoyed the humor parts that you threw in though with the gang overhearing what was going on. Eric’s reactions were the funniest though his ‘I’m deaf’ LOL very funny! Also some funny parts with Fez letting it slip that he’d been a bit of a peeping tome, his lame cover ups were what had me laughing. And speaking of Fez I was really surprised to see him and Lucy together. Think a line in the previous chapter had me thinking she was gone for good. But good for Fez, finally getting the girl

And then Kelso, oh Kelso, Kelso, Kelso. I really thought he was gonna figure it all out! I know he’s not the brightest light bulb but come on Kelso! Lol Though I really did think it was a good twist of not having him find out then and there because it threw us readers off, so good job there! Plus you had some more funny laughs when Jackie discovers that they’ve been discovered.

Nice job on recreating that last scene form the show. Had moments we were able to recognize but at the same time added in some new stuff!

Overall I thought this was a rally great chapter! Very steamy but also had some good laughs. Will be reading more soon! Till then keep up the fantastic work!
nannygirl chapter 10 . 10/31/2012
And yet another wonderfully terrific chapter!

The opening with Fez and Lucy was sweet. Fez is a good guy and it’s nice getting to see him have some better luck with the ladies. Poor Lucy, she’s really hurt but I think it’s better that she realized Eric and Donna were still in love on her own rather than have someone else tell her or have her walk in on a scene like the one she walked in on Jackie and Hyde.

Nice job on the Donna and Eric scene. I really liked the whole cookie dough thing and Eric teasing Donna about her cooking. The part about the beer and how he’d need it to kill the bacteria made em laugh. Yeah those two will not e staying apart for very long.

Aww the scene with Hyde and Jackie on the water tower was my favorite from this chapter. It was so sweet. They really should have thought of that place a long time ago! Lol And once again I like the mentions of the previous and earlier episodes. It always bugged me that they were never mentioned on the show after that. Especially when it came to the Jackie and Hyde moments. But anyways, Hyde admitting he wanted to e her boyfriend but saying he wouldn’t say it was so very Hyde. And the ‘yes dear’ at the end was a great way to end the scene.

Poor Donna during that part with Lucy coming in, really wished she wouldn’t have gotten so upset besides with the way Lucy ran out earlier and what Eric said to her before plus all the cookie dough stuff, wished she could have seen that she and Eric weren’t gonna be apart much longer. Guess that whole thing with Casey and California really hurt though.

Thought the break up scene with Lucy and Eric was very very well done. Both were very mature and you could tell both really did care for the other but just not in that same way that Donna and Eric care for each other. Cute touch with the ‘live long and prosper’ lol

And another lovely DE scene at their spot on the Vista Cruiser. SO glad that Donna was able to figure out what happened with Eric and Lucy this time. And there kiss was so sweet, loved the way you had Hyde and Jackie come in too and the teasing between Eric and Jackie had me laughing. Good stuff!

Again this was another very enjoyable chapter! So glad that now Donna and Eric are back together and things are going well with Jackie and Hyde I hope here no bad changes for either couple in the upcoming chapters!

Terrific work once more! Really liked it! Will be reading more soon! Till then keep up the wonderful work!
PrettyinPink33 chapter 13 . 10/27/2012
Great ending! I enjoyed it!
nannygirl chapter 9 . 10/26/2012
Fantastic work on this fantastic chapter!

The opening scene with Donna and Eric was so very lovely and sweet. I liked how you had them able to talk to each other, and not feeling too weird about it. Having spend time on the Vista Cruiser together was brilliant. That really is their place. The conversation about the stars was one of my favorites in the chapter. Eric asking what they looked like in California Donna’s explanation of how they were the same but not as fun without someone there to look at them with. liked how you didn’t change things and have Donna have dated someone too while over in California. Poor Eric felt guilty about that. Oh but her last lien there ‘they weren’t you.’ LOVE!

Terrific scene with Hyde carrying Jackie into her hose. And I loved how this is the scene when he finds out about her parents being gone. It was heartbreaking and yet so sweet at the same time because Hyde was holding her through out the scene and was wanting answers. He’s protective her and it’s cute. Also really enjoyed the extra details you threw in there like the sheet covered furniture with dust, Jackie turning on the lights as they passed them, etc. Nice job!

Very great work on the next scene! Had some very very sweet moments and a good few laughs too! Hyde saying her bedroom looked like something the Easter Bunny puked up had me laughing. And Jackie being so out of it made me giggle a few times too. And the Bad Jackie! Part too lol Great stuff. Aw and Jackie saying that she loved him, very sweet and I loved how Hyde didn’t say it right away and the chapter kinda built up to it. AN dwhat a terrific build up too. I loved hearing Hyde confess that he did feel something on that Veterans Day date because we all know it was true! Loved how he only confessed it because he knew she wouldn’t remember him saying it lol. You did a really wonderful job on that whole scene.

Nice filler scene with Kelso and Fez being Kelso and Fez. lol And poor Kelso, I almost feel bad for him thinking he still has a chance with Jackie. Really liked that little moment you gave him and Jackie, just because they were each others first loves and so it would make sense for them to have a moment like that but then I didn’t like the moment so much when Hyde walked in and my zennie heart took over lol But then I loved eth scene again because it helped give us a sweet zennie moment. But really poor Hyde. He’s can get so insecure when it comes to Jackie and Kelso can’t he? Really hope that will change in this story since it didn’t seem to change much in the show. And Jackie remembering bits and pieces of last night lol Hoping she remembered some of the bits that I got to read lol

Another great scene with Eric thinking he had figured out what was going on with Hyde and saying he was dating a nurse. Oh Eric you’re not even a bit close. Had to laugh at this line because it was very Hyde ‘"You're gonna be spending a lot of time hanging out at the hospital if you don't shut it, Forman." LOL And I liked the Donna and Jackie friendship moments you had in there, Jackie being sympathetic when Lucy and Eric kissed and Donna going along with cover of the whole bathing suit thing.

A funny and sweet moment with Hyde and Jackie and the whole nurse thing and him tickling her. Very nicely written. And then the big moment came. Eric found out and it was just as hilarious as it was on the show! And I really enjoyed the DE moment that followed with Eric figuring out she had known and the mini fight they had before they started laughing. It was a fun moment but not so fun for Lucy. Have a feeling she’s gonna be gone soon. Interesting that Fez followed her out though.

Again this was a very terrific chapter! It was a great read! Will be back to read more! Till then keep up the wonderful work!
RIFA chapter 13 . 10/26/2012
Terrific story. Great job on the ending
nannygirl chapter 8 . 10/24/2012
Wonderful work on this very wonderful chapter!

The first scene with Jackie and Donna was really great! You’ve always done such a great job at writing Donna and Jackie’s friendship and this scene was another job very well done! Them eating ice cream and having girl talk at Donna’s house was something I could picture perfectly! I liked how this made Donna feel like things were normal, almost like this was her welcome back home and back to reality from California. Also really liked Jackie talking about some of the things she and Hyde had been doing since they got together and how much she had changed and matured being with him. Was glad Jackie came out and told Donna that she had been the one to set Lucy and Eric up, again I was surprised Donna didn’t get more upset but I’m glad she didn’t either. Had to laugh out loud at Jackie saying she could start a rumor for Donna about Lucy being a man lol That’s a true friend there! lol

Another very nice scene with the guys and Lucy. Kelso and Lucy’s interaction didn’t seem to go as well as it could have gone but with Kelso being well Kelso we had to have seen that coming lol And Eric still teasing Hyde about his girlfriend lol wait till he finds out the truth! Really great part with Hyde in his room, poor guy was really getting insecure there and thinking about the way Jackie used to be before she was with him was not helping. And then when he realized the panties were missing and saw the bloody washcloth, his concern for Jackie was so sweet.

Good work on the Donna and Lucy meeting, like how the characters were like us readers and expecting the worst. A nice DE moment in there too with the exchanged smiles. And I almost thought Lucy was gonna join in on the circle but I suppose it was better this way with just the gang. Another very sweet moment with Hyde and Jackie talking about her injury and his double meaning of ‘I’m sorry you got hurt’ Nicely done! Wonderfully written part with Donna catching that scene with Hyde and Jackie, really loved her thoughts on seeing it ad realizing it had always been there. And the DE moment that followed was great, it was simple but had that hint of something that made you know things aren’t over between them.

And I thought the circle scene was really well done! Great job! It was fun but not just the crazy random fun like circles usually are.

LOVED the scene with Jackie and Hyde in the kitchen. It was sweet with him taking care of her injury. It had some funny moments with Jackie’s reaction to her needing stitches plus the talk about the other guys too. And it had a bit of heartbreak too when Jackie asked if he had been breaking up with her and he responded by pointing out they needed to be dating to breakup with someone, that ‘Oh’ from Jackie, poor thing.

Aw and I thought the ending was really sweet with Donna and Eric reminiscing. I really do hope those two kids will work things out. Lucy is a nice character but it’s almost like the more we see her the less we like her or at least like her with Eric. Maybe it’s cuz Donna’s there now.

Anyway this was a fabulous chapter. A really great read! Will be reading more soon! Till then keep up the wonderful work!
hanselnext chapter 13 . 10/24/2012
Bravo! The epilogue was just brilliant and I just loved it. Great way to bring them back together ... in the basement where it all began. Awesome!

When they finally got together at the end it made my heart swell. Those two were just meant to be together like E/D too bad the stupid writers couldn't give us the ending that zennies wanted. The way you ended the chapter was so funny. :D

A clean-shaven and fit Hyde was sitting on his usual chair in the Forman's basement for the first time in weeks

- Lol. The porn-stache is gone. Thank God.

I liked how you had both of them still lusting after each other after all this time apart. I always imagined that Hyde and Jackie were the kind of couple that used their bodies to communicate their feelings to each other more than words. Plus Hyde was always able to open up somewhat after some physical contact with Jackie well at least in your story he was.

She tried to sit up, but he was straddling her lap which prevented her from doing anything but lying there on her back like an overturned turtle waiting to expire.

- Great line.

He looked tenderly at her perfect face, with it's delicate but strong features and planted a kiss in the center of her forehead. Hyde smoothed the hair out of her face, then kissed her nose, her chin, both cheeks and finally her lips.
Jackie remembered him doing this once before, years ago, when she thought he was rejecting sex with her and she wanted to leave his room.

- I loved that you brought it full circle and that Hyde was finally able to go first and declare his feelings instead of Jackie having to do it first. After everything he put her through he had to put himself out there and beg for forgiveness.

"I miss you, doll." He caressed the side of her jaw and brought his lips to her ear. "I wanna be with you."

- AWW. Finally! I wish he would have said this to her on the show. You wrote in such a believable way and it wasn't too sappy.

He'd tried and failed. He would've done anything to get her back again. He would have given in to almost any one of her crazy demands, but she made no demands. She wanted nothing from him. At that moment he realized she was over him. She didn't love him anymore, and he felt the weight of a thousand bricks fall onto his chest.

- So sad and you made me just ache and feel for Hyde.

Now both naked, Jackie slid onto Hyde's lap and wrapped her arms and legs around him. "It might be fun to live together at some point, though." she admitted. He raised an eyebrow. "Would sleep dressed like this every night?"
"Would you make it worth my while?" she retorted.
He nipped her earlobe then soothed it with his tongue. "I will always make it worth your while." he growled quietly in her ear as he began to move inside of her.

- This was my favorite part of the whole chapter. They're finally together as it was meant to be.

Having Eric and Donna walk in while they were having sex was too funny. I always love how you're able to include humor into this story.

Anyways thanks for writing this wonderful fanfic. It was great that you were able to update so quickly throughout. This story is one of my fav's. I just adored it :D

Sad its over cause you completely drew me into this wonderful story but I hope you continue to write more J/H stories.
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