This is... an insightful story. I must confess that I've just read one when oneself? ends in the hpverse, but in that one the person was confined to the RoR.

This should be fun. This chapter was definetly interesting.

Awesome story, read through it in one day! Sure, it's not perfect, and I agree mostly with your analysis. Still, would love to read the sequel as soon as possible!

You killed him!? Fuck that! This story was a waste of time!

Ahahahahaha! I just absolutely LOVE seeing references to Fics I've read before!

I was in tears at Omake #3!

Dude, wow. Your story was wonderful. I never expected William to "survive", but it hurt like hell anyway.
Your dialogue-heaviness was refreshing and makes more sense to me for character development. Most
fics I have read tend to have the opposite problem.
The post-mortem is something that I have not seen before like this, but it is really great and shows that you
care about becoming a better writer. All of the things that I can currently come up with that I think are bad
or could be improved are already kind of covered by the points you listed.

This story will be on my all time favourite list and I will definitely come back to read it again.
Thank you for writing it.

Not only is this fan fiction amazing, it's main character demonstrates the proper level of understanding and joy one would expect from an avid fanfic reader of this fandom dropped into the origin point.

From the character referring back to the cannon whenever something seems way to off, to referring to fanon and fanfiction on a few-chapter basis, this is a joy to read.

It's defiantly earned it's current status as one of the best Self-Inserts you will ever read.

Additionally; Great work adverting 'the unchanging timeline' issue(wherein our character seems to have no actual effect on the progression of the cannon plotline) and the 'Win everything with knowledge'(wherein the character has a good memory of what occurs, has appeared during the cannon, and, despite everything, wins just by knowing what will happen). Advantages taken have their own consequences on occasion, and even if one knows what's coming, your character understands that, sometimes, it's best not to change anything.

I laughed, raved and cried (mostly in the end) while I read this story. It is the BEST SI I've ever read (and I've read A LOT). Truly a masterpiece... *dreamy look*
Love Roza

P.S. I may or may not have developed a bizarre crush on William... um... you? And having a crush on someone (fictional or not) is not something I normally do. This story was really full of surprises.
In a good way. ;)

P.P.S. Though I did NOT enjoy bawling my eyes out at the end. *mock-glares*

Aww you know girls would be charmed when a boy notice their attires beauty ;)

just a thought but one of the Chinese symbols for luck has 7 strokes so...

two things,
self inserts a practice in self glorification if an albeit very well written one
fiftieth fanfic out of 600,000. really 50... i get its an arbitrary number just if you're gonna write a self insert embellish a bit, maybe 500th
all considered if this hasn't been ignored yet in my rant, I'm looking forward to the story do wish it had been updated more recently though.

As a person who normally only reads stories 100K, and has read literally hundreds of stories on this site (Over 300ish or more by now), this is one of my favorite top 30 now.

On a scale of 0-10, I would say a high 9. I only docked points because I feel how HARSH an ending this story has considering the "Drama/Humor" tag. Yes it was very VERY funny in parts, but you punched me in the gut with NO REMORSE at the end. Again, I LOVE THIS STORY... but I was crying like a wittle wittle boy at the end of this.

Things I really liked: Well portrayed emotions concerning being in a new world, uncertainty about the future, and gradual building of affections. If I had to label this story, I would almost be tempted to label it Drama/Family because of how deep the emotional content of this story gets.

I think that the Luna aspect is also F*ing well done. The sun gazing sections of the story added an almost mystic quality to her Luna'ness, and added a richness to the story that really makes you feel good inside.

The inter-personal byplay is so good I think it could be considered easily high quality in a professional book. The emotional instability of the main character was also welcome, as it portrayed a person projecting strength even to himself very well, very subtly.

I won't pester for a happier ending, although I would love one, because the story is so well done I feel it would cheapen the whole thing. That said, when you teased us at the end and described the whole "Walking forward with hand in front of eyes" it reminded me of Alucard doing a similar creepy walk, and I had a quick hope you would have your character replace Alacard in his world... the rest didn't seem to match up for that though.

I can't come up with any major issues to fix. Astoria was well designed, she had depth and character way beyond the films or other fan-fictions. The door-knocker incident was inspired, and frankly I feel bad that I can't come up with annoyances for you to fix. I normally love to give good/bad stuff so that they can be fixed or at least considered.

Long comment short, WRITE MORE. If possible, more with this character. Random OC with heavy knowledge has become one of my favorite dudes thanks to you, and as of right now you are the only seller on this market.

I love and hate you so much. I cried so hard during the epilogue. I absolutely adored William and all his quirks and jokes. Your design of Daphne was quite creative and I felt more unique than other interpretations. I must admit I did not see that ending with the grave yard coming. How dare you leave such a cliff hanger!? Amazing work, I thoroughly enjoyed it. :)

Okay I have to admit that omake about Lucius was pretty funny.

Can't begin to tell you what an amazing story this is. Loved every minute of it and haven't read any others like it. Your dialogue is fabulous. Keep up the excellent writing!