Yet another great chapter.

Aww not another cliffhanger! It's great seeing them out of school, but I agree with Astoria, they should do something fun. I just realized that we rarely see them in classes, and I thought it would be interesting, because its rare to see them interacting with the teachers.

My face hasn't stopped hurting from smiling too much since like the third chapter in. Very well done. I'm usually not a fan of self inserts but this is one of the best stories I've read in a long time. By the way, if you ever read Naruto fan fiction you should look up Dreaming of Sunshine by Silver Queen. It is the only other self insert that I've ever really enjoyed and the main character is born into the Narutoverse with knowledge of the series which you mentioned liking in one of your author notes.

While William's dialogue is amusing on a level which is unparalleled in any fan fiction I have read my favorite parts of your story have to me your Luna and Daphne. In Luna's case this is one of only a handful of stories I've read where she comes of as whimsical and a bit ethereal without also appearing less than sane. This is quite possibly the best Luna I have ever read (or at least the one that fits best with what I think Luna should be) and that goes double for Daphne. You mentioned being inspired by the Daphne of fannon which is obviously the case but I feel like you took it to another level. There are plenty of Harry Potter stories out there featuring her as the "Slitherin Ice Queen" but usually Harry saves her and she immideatly lets him in or it was all just a mask to protect her squishy insides in the first place. Then by chapter five she's just another generic girl to throw at Harry while he does his hero thing. Not that all Harry/Daphne stories are like that, but quite a lot. Just like with Luna, this Daphne just embodies everything i feel like The Ice Queen Daphne Greengrass is supposed to be. ...I'll stop rambling now otherwise ill just keep going on and on. If you can't tell, Daphne is one of my favorite characters in HP fan fiction.

My only complaint about this story so far is that it's going to be over far too soon. :( Maybe you will write another Harry Potter fic afterwords? Preferably with plenty of Luna and hopefully a Daphne pairing. ;)

Thanks for this amusing story!

-Llama

Uh oh! This doesn't sound good. Hopefully they can talk their way out of this without too much trouble, and Harry doesn't get caught.

So far great story but I feel sorry for this guy he there and knows he cant stay and cant even love the woman he loves. Will waits for more story.

I love the hugging scene in the Room of Requirement. Another great chapter.

Well it's beginning to look like Old moldy is gonna be in a world of hurt in that cemetery...LOL

Yet another great chapter.

I laughed at the part where Harry asks William if he's his son, LOL :)

Oh it's getting exciting! The third task is getting closer and closer! I hope Will doesn't have to go back after the end of the school year.

good chapter, byes

Awesome chapter again, especially the part where harry was all "I am your father" and Will went "NOOOO" Oh, wait. Wrong series. But still, that was pretty cool

Very well done so far. Good of you to stick to first person without diverging. Keep up the good work.

Awesome chapter!

Well you did it again...My dreams to night will most likely run along these lines...its great fun...LOL